my smile

i remember the feelings you gave me,

and when i think of you, my soul flies free.

Even while my heart aches deeply,

memoeries of you let me treat others sweetly.

 

please stop me from crying,

help me win this fight.

whispers of the wind, the water,

the cherry blossoms of the night...

help my smile awaken with a joy unserpassed,

even if such gental things,

were never ment to last

 

Author's Note

not normally like me, but whatever :P -Athena

Reviews

[A.E. Surdam]

Awwww. It is so beautiful and soooo romantic. When I read it, I felt like I wanted to cry (in a happy way)(the way you cry at weddings) Lol. "Whispers of the wind, the water, the cherry blossoms of the night..." I just adored this line. And the imagery was just beyond imagination. :)

[Coffee Vampier]

lovely and sweet

~Alice~

[Maya Storm]

What a peculiar thing the say ...."memoeries of you let me treat others sweetly." It is one of the most beautiful lines I've even seen writing. That line right there made the entire piece for me. Pure brilliance on your path.

[Rene Velez]

cool write the rhyme scheme is great, I was impressed and it takes a good write to do that....

[November Gold]

Sometimes what is "normally like us" takes a vacation and something awesome replaces it. This was short and the point well made. Heartache is never fun, but to every dance there is a new step learned that will carry you forth into the next one more steady on your feet. ;)

[Tasha]

This was so beautiful and romantic. I loved it. Great piece!

[joshua deathdealer]

beautiful

[Samantha Heaton]

This is a really good poem.. Good write~

[Sukriti Suki]

I read this twice as I felt I didn't get the full emotion of the under-tone in the first read...I am touched.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

really nice, i liked the last 2 lines of the first stanza and also these 2 lines:
"whispers of the wind, the water,
the cherry blossoms of the night..."