my smile

i remember the feelings you gave me,

and when i think of you, my soul flies free.

Even while my heart aches deeply,

memoeries of you let me treat others sweetly.

 

please stop me from crying,

help me win this fight.

whispers of the wind, the water,

the cherry blossoms of the night...

help my smile awaken with a joy unserpassed,

even if such gental things,

were never ment to last

 

Author's Note

not normally like me, but whatever :P -Athena

Reviews

[A.E. Surdam]

Awwww. It is so beautiful and soooo romantic. When I read it, I felt like I wanted to cry (in a happy way)(the way you cry at weddings) Lol. "Whispers of the wind, the water, the cherry blossoms of the night..." I just adored this line. And the imagery was just beyond imagination. :)

[Archia]

I really liked the rhyme, it made it flow quite nicely. This was quite a beautiful poem. "memoeries of you let me treat others sweetly." I love the meaning of that line.

[compositionc]

Sweet and wonderfully worder.
:D
Fantastically done. Made me want to cry in a good way.

[Kathryn]

Romantic and beautiful :) I love the way your poems can be happy and sweet one day, and haunting the next. Great work :)

[Niki Wilson]

Nice!!!!

[Silent Knight]

Very nice.

[Short.Nerd]

I like it :)

[Kat]

this is soo pretty and it reminds me of someone dude you did such a nice job :)

[Kiari Sabon]

i like it

[Ryzo]

spontanious and beautifuly written just the way all poems should read. well done! :)