thoughts

here again i stand

shadows and darkness ingulf my soul

cries can no longer be heard

 

i stand in silence

just waiting for your return

but i know you wont come for me

 

your selfishness and foolishness

im fed up with it

so what? ive given up hope 

like someones realy gonna come along and take me away

 

 

 

Author's Note

:P -athena

Reviews

[Silverwing]

Again, I like it. Although, like I said in my last comment I gave you, I'm not a poetry critic, I can't help feeling left hoping for more. Its interesting because the speaker is saying, "I've given up hope," and yet the reader is longing for more. The reader wants to know what path the speaker is going to take because many paths are imagined yet only one can be traveled at a time.

"I know you won't come for me" - There's something profound about that statement. We, as people, tend to hold some kind of expectation for the others around us and when those expectations aren't met we become disappointed. Obviously something has happened to cause the speaker to believe that they are going to be left alone, waiting. There comes a point were we need to realize, and accept, the fact that sometimes the person we're waiting for isn't the person we need.

Very interesting thoughts. Keep writing!

[MsFrazier]

no, girl, no one will come and take you away. but the girl can love herself.

'engulf'

[Kathryn]

Short, but I like it :) nice work :)

[Niki Wilson]

Awww Love this!!!

[Kat]

its good its just never good to give up in the end sorry i don't mean to be mean

[Kiari Sabon]

i like it

[Cassiopia Summers]

I agree with Silverwing. This is an honest write though. It's simplicity still has the reader yearning for more, and that's what we want right? Lol. Great work.

[Rene Velez]

nice write

[joshua deathdealer]

Good expression of emotions.

[DontBlink158]

You show your emotions clearly and i thought it was very well writen. Once again great job! :)

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

sense of doubt and loss of hope
i really like this line here:
"shadows and darkness ingulf my soul"
:)