Winter

Ten word poem.

Frozen in time,

                             with crystallized fate,

idly awaiting Destiny's call.

Author's Note

Ten word poem on the theme of Winter. Feel free to review. As always, thanks for reading.

Reviews

[Kruppz]

Those ten words captured the season well. Ten word poem that I've read almost ten times by now. Good use of abstract imagery. The best part is the poem actually creates the feel of the season and (i don't know if i put it right but that's how i feel) gives it a soul, not to mention depth.

[Acropolix]

I was aiming for the feeling of winter rather than the description of winter, so it's good to hear you find a soul in this poem. Thank you.

[crystallized illusions]

Very well done in ten words. I love it!
Good write.

[Mary]

that's what winter is- the time of waiting. good write.

[Sami Khalil]

Brilliant write.

[Lina Grey]

This definitely expresses the slow, slumberous (not sure if that's a word but it fits my purposes) feeling of this cold season, with a falling format to mimic the falling of snow, and words like "frozen" and "crystallized" which pull together the ideas of winter, leaving a patient, almost peaceful feeling. I do love winter, and I believe you've captured it quite well for just ten words. Simply lovely my friend

[Acropolix]

Glad to hear I'm not alone in feeling the warmth of winter.

[Lina Grey]

Winter is one of my four favorite seasons :)

[TLK]

Typo: "crystallized".

There is an excellent link between "frozen" and "crystallised". I think the triplet to make up the family is 'idly'. There is a feeling of the weight of the snow, here; and the indolence of winter's slumber.

The 'awaiting Destiny's call" looks forward to transition. This caps the piece off wonderfully.

[Acropolix]

Thank you for pointing out the mistake. I appreciate your positve remarks.

[Acropolix]

'positive'...

[The Turk]

Great poem it fits everything the season of winter does. Beautifully written in such a simple way

[Kelsey]

This is so simple, yet so lovely. It says so much in so few words. Nicely done. x