Precarious

Take from it what you will.

Precarious

Everything is used up and I am empty, 

Like a shabby shack left for a century. 

An uncertain roof shrouds a vacant space,

Idle and drab, it's sort of a haggard place.

Inside you wont find a fireplace of embers,

Just dusty old coals of ifs, buts and faint remembrance. 

The discoloured carpet is threadbare and worn,

Embroidery faded and the heavy curtains torn. 

The lifeless eyes in aged photographs stare through the gloom, 

Reminding you of the tarnished memories in the room. 

Cobwebs tickle the door frames weakly gesturing for laughter,

But there is no humour in this dismal ever after. 

Rotten floorboards threaten with collapse,

And sorrowful souls lay decayed in traps.

A memoir of distant love grieves on the table - 

Wilting flowers from a time long ago are now frail. 

Shadows of doubt sweep across the lonely hall, 

And the cracked and stained windows are weeping from a storm. 

This fractured house is a home no more,

A desolate plain crippled to the core.

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

*knock knock* - are you home Miss Havisham?
Surely this must be her address or that of a similar poor person abandoned by love and laughter and life?

[boobalajcushion]

I used the house as a metaphor for myself. I usually write whenever my emotions are heightened, so it can be quite dramatic and not at all how I alwas feel. I forgot about Miss Havisham though, excellent work, always loved that one :)

[Tony Jordan]

You were the one who did the excellent work ma'am. Thank you :)

[boobalajcushion]

Ah thank you! So lovely getting feedback as I've only recently had the confidence to start sharing this kind of thing. Always found it super personal due to the conditions I work under to achieve them. Will have a gander through your page :D

[Tony Jordan]

typing in the dark here so dont take offence if I dont reply tonight to any (non-obligatory) comments, hints or tips you might be so kind as to offer. :)

[AcasualPawn]

Excellent poem,, dripping with sorrow
and Loneliness.........
Nice work fellow poet