Break up

Me and Tristin broke up.

Your stuck in my mind,

I just can't let you go.

I can't believe that you left,

Or that you called me a stupid hoe.

You were my first love, 

But I know who you really are now.

Love blinded me so much that I couldn't see,

See the person you could be.

I hope I'm better off without you.

You were my everything,

But now I have nothing.

Reviews

true colors tend to come out at the worst times.

and true loves always tend to get stuck in the back of our minds.

One of the reviewers said that this is cliche, but we can't help how we feel.
and clearly they haven't been through anything like this or they'd have a different outlook.

Good job.

[A Risen Heroine.]

Ugh.... I can relate to a break up...
He were my everything, not that he's gone, I feel so hollow, so sick...
I'm stuck in the life he left behind.
I feel you.. I really do..
Nicely written and thanks for sharing.

~A Fallen Heroine~

[Allison]

Phalen is quite right. I can't help it if I write on the subject that breaks my heart and the hearts of others. Thanks for the reviews everyone!

[Angel Veselinov]

Nice poem :) great read i only could suggests to finish it now i have only me :P no one really got nothing because he got himself :) always with him :) Thanks for sharing :)

[marisa starkilicious]

We all have that person, I believe. Unless you are absuredly lucky and you stay with your first love. But often, your first love is like a test run. It gets better the second time around, when you know what you're doing.

Anyway, I've done enough rambling. Good job on this.

[Warick Ten Bohmer]

Better off without him. I've never called any of my exs stupid hoe, and well considering what I've heard people say about past relationships I guess that's rather mild, but I can bet it still hurts just the same.

I'd consider making it three stanzas, other than that it's a pretty decent piece of poetry. Clichéd though...

[BELLA]

i kmow that felling