Lier.

About my ex-friend who stole my crush/almost boyfriend.

 You say I can't have what I want all the time,

That life isn't fair.

You say he's yours forever,

That I'm too shabby to compare.

He says that your hot,

That you shine like a star.

But would he love you so much if he saw you on the inside?

I've seen you on the inside.

Your like the devil himself.

Your rude and spiteful,

But to him, your sweet and innocent.

You plant false promises and lies in his head,

But would he love you so much if he knew that your just a big lie?

 

Reviews

Great poem. Just keep in mind that you should have used "you're" instead of "your". "Your" is for ownership while "you're" is a contraction of "you are". Just handy to know, and "lier" is actually spelt "liar". As a general rule, people who spell everything well are taken more seriously than others, so don't think I'm picking on you :)

As for the poem itself, how you described the girl is so true when it comes to many pretty girls who think they can have everything they want. Good job on this one.

[gimpy]

hate is inspiration for most I try not to writ in anger cuse my writing suk wen I do it but It works for you, Oky review time all in all the poem was exelent the pasion leaped form the page but think wat would happen if you started dateing the guy Im not gonna give you the every thing happens for a reason junk ( I hate it wen people do it to me) but had you have dated the guy then youd be the girl in this poem trust me lose a crush it hurts I know but lose a friend it kill I know dat as well

[Lexi =]]

This has happened to me twice. I know exactly how you feel. Great poem. Its my new favorite now =)
GOOD JOB!