Breathing

Breathing in all of these smells, your close by. Get away, get away...

 I'm breathing,

all of these smells,

I smell you amidst them.

Too close, too close,

Get away, get away.

Not enough air.

I move to my left,

and your smell is fainter,

but still strong.

You come closer.

I am wrapped in your small arms.

You are warm.

My throat burns of the fire of hell,

the fire of thirst.

Come closer my child let me wrap you in my embrace,

where you will never leave.

 

Author's Note

This person is something, but I don't know what, I think it's a bit too faint.

Reviews

[Voice]

This seems pretty good I'm not sure what you need help on??? Maybe just add a little more description of what's happening and what you are feeling in this piece. I think it's good though just the way it is and I don't really think you need to change anything at all...

Voice