Socks

  "Funny how things work out, huh?"
                        he laughed, looking over at her sitting in the sunlight,
                        yellow socks on her feet.
                                   "What's funny about it?"
                        she barely looked up from her book, but he could see
                        the slight smile slung across her face.
  "Okay, 'funny' isn't the word but that's the expression, you know? Anyway, isn't it crazy how you could be-"
                                      "Compelling? Is that a better word
                                       for right now? For what you're
                                       thinking?"
                        she cut him off, a look of concentration hung on her
                        face, her eyes on his.
  "Sure. But that's not the point of what I'm saying though. It's that-"
                                      "But it does matter. Don't you
  want your words to mean what
  you say?"
  "Words can't express perfectly how you feel, ever. Don't you think?"
                       she was quiet for a while so he looked back over to her-
                       she was back at her book.
  "What do you think?"
                       her hair blew in the wind. It turned auburn as the sunlight caught it.
                                      "Yeah, I get it. Just kind of weird to accept."
                       her mouth tightened, her eyes still on the book. He was
                       quiet. She looked up.
  "I mean we created those words,
                                      we have control over them. We've been
  using them for thousands and thousands
                                       of years, and we haven't mastered them.
  Interesting, to say the least. Scary, to
  say a lot.
                       She looked at him now, her look something between a
                       glare and the look of a harmless doe.
  "So what was so 'funny'?"

Author's Note

So, I was sitting outside, supposed to be working on schoolwork and this just came into my mind so I wrote this. This format looked A LOT better written down on paper, and not so much typed up, so if y'all have any suggestions format wise, that would be great!

Anyways, I wrote this to be related to my last story "Heaven", and these two, plus another story is hopefully going to be part of a 3 part series. I hope you guys like it! Let me know what you guys think!

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Format? Ah ... it's one of my fav. formats you've bleed with, indeed. I like how beautifully and thoughtfully you show what's meant to be shown. Quite frankly, whilst I was "just" reading your words, in the mid of half reading, I realized .. am not just reading but watching .. listening to some words spoken/shown in the beginning of some "film" ... Whao!

Are you one scriptwriter?

I kinda like your taste, you certainly taste so good. At first, I thought, the title: "Socks" could be related to 'bout, you know, "one night stand" ... or whatever.. blah.. blah.. blah... but as I continued reading your words, I came to know .. oh, it's 'bout "reality" ... that hardly seen across the world.

I resonate something outta your stuff... that ...
...

"One boy .. one girl ..
She reads, but he loves her ..
..wants her to be in his heart ..
but she fears the world ...
cos.. the world's 'bout curse ...
& it certainly brings poor heartaches that hurt..
so she reads .. keeps eyes on books not to get blurred
thou', he touches her heart ..
& at last, she looks up & finds.. what's love."

What a beautiful story you've come up with! Excellent! ;)

[K.]

That makes me so happy you said that it felt like you were watching it because that's really what I strive for, and actually exactly what happens when I read stuff and when I am thinking of stuff to write! I try and write it as I would shoot it with a camera!

I also really love your taking of my title! This is going to sound SO dumb but I named it socks because I was sitting out in my college quad writing this and a girl walked up and complimented the pair of fun socks I was wearing so I worked it into this, but we can forget that and imagine I had some deep meaning like yours to it ;)) I love your little piece as well!

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thank you so much!

[Adam Adams]

You're welcome, Kess...
Oh, well ...

... thanks for making thoughts clear, I was, you know, actually wondering, the girl - metaphor - that you've portrayed in words - in your poetry might be you .. cos, I still remember one of my fav. writes written by you called "Something" ... so, I guess, it's good to resonate things outta different difference scenes to make characters more clear and story more vivid understanding. Right? Correct me if am wrong? lol

[K.]

I'll have to go check that one out but a lot of my stuff is a mix of things based off me and then just my imagination!!

[Emily]

I like how you had dialogue in the poem. I also like how the ending tied back to the beginning.

[K.]

Thank you! I really liked this piece, so I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[M.E.Lyle]

I like the interaction you've created between these two. I felt a part of the conversation. I must admit, I had to go back and read it twice.
I loved, "her hair blew in the wind. It turned auburn as the sunlight caught it." I can picture it clearly in my mind. Great job.

[K.]

Thank you!! I love that part of the poem/story thing as well! I always strive to make the reader seem like they are there or watching the situation happen! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Stan Lee]

Aw, kinda sweet I thought! She has a point though I possibly she could have made it more tactfully. :) I agree with Craig on the format, it makes it difficult to follow.
Great write!
Thanks for sharing! :)

[K.]

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it!! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
read moreThank you very much for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it!! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Do you have any ideas on how to fix that format?

[Craig2591]

So, so true, as every writer knows. The same is true for art. Sometimes it is frustrating to try to paint what I feel but can't no matter how I try.

As far as the format goes... I didn't like it. I thought it interfered with the flow of the story.

[K.]

Like I said, the format looks a WHOLE lot better written down on paper, but then again, what doesn't? Any suggestions to better that format?

Also like I said a couple of reviews below, I'm glad that meaning came out, but it wasn't my intended meaning. Hopefully I'll be able to change it soon and maybe you can come back and check it out :) thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts!

[Jordan Smith]

This was a wonderful piece you wrote here. Loved the imagery and emotion put into it, especially for just a sudden thought to turn into this wonderful piece of art. Wonderful job Kassie :)

[K.]

Thank you, Jordan! I'm glad you enjoyed it! It definitely needs some tweaks, but I'm glad the imagery and emotion came out like it did.

[Jordan Smith]

:) Your Welcome

[St.Quin]

somehow I agree to what the subject is talking about, if I understand it right. sometimes words, no matter how definitive, can't portray what you really want to say.

[K.]

Yes, that was part of it. Unfortunately, I can't really get across the part that's in my head that I really wanted to be the main part of the story. I might need to go back and make a second draft if I ever get any time and hopefully that will help! Thanks for reading!