Heaven

  "So that's what it's like, you think?"

          "Heaven? Yeah. I'd like to think that that's it would be what it'd be like for me."

  "For you?"

          "I like to think Heaven is like the world- it's just easier to travel. So you can go
            wherever you want, whenever you want. I'd go here."

  "Out of all the places in the world that you've been?"

          "Yeah. Just look at it. The light coming through the trees, the wind pushing
            the grass over just slightly, the road bending with the landscape, instead of
             cutting through it. And it's so quiet. It's Heaven, I'm tellin' you."

  "With the crickets and the fireflies? The cows?"

          "Yeah, ha, all of them. You'd be there too."

          "You don't have to be though."

  "I'd be there."

          "Really?"

  "Yes."

          "Where would you go, do you think?"

  "Some place like this for a while, definitely. Then maybe
somewhere in the mountains- with the pine trees and
the wildflowers and that crisp air. Then maybe to some
big city, I don't know quite where. I think I'd be the traveling
one."

          "I can see you doing that."

  "Yeah."

          "Would you go by yourself?"

  "You could come."

          "I traveled a lot in this lifetime."

  "Oh, yeah."

  "I could always stay here."

          "That's not your Heaven though."

  "But you'd be here."

          "But you'd be everywhere."

Author's Note

A conversation between two people about Heaven. I don't know if this is the best format, so suggestions would be greatly appreciated it! But in other news, I finished my first week of college today, and I finally felt "inspired" enough to write something. I hope y'all like it, and have had a good week too!

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Seemed, you've captured the whole scenario of your fantasy/dreams in words. Not a bad shot. This stageplay seemed like a real nice conversation of two lovers not just "people" who are having a great pie of time with each others & exchanging their thoughts. Furthermore, when two people are in love of each others or may be, lost into their own ecstatic state, they certainly talking of such fantasy things & you've filmized such things very evocatively in your story-arcs. Nice work.

[K.]

I've missed your reviews, and I'm so glad to see one when I've logged in! Thank you for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Philip Muls]

Heaven is a place on earth, well done. A very original approach and format, just a casual conversation, entirely likely to happen. Feels natural, good flow.

[K.]

Thank you! And yes, that's what I like most about this piece I think- how it is just a conversation. There's no action, you're not quite sure who is talking- you just hear this conversation and know it is a conversation you have had or could easily have. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Craig2591]

What I like best about this is that the reader gets to set the scene. Are they young? Old? Are they a couple? Friends? Which one is male or female? Or perhaps they are same sex. It's a story for anyone and everyone.

Love it.

[K.]

That's what I love doing- make it vague, and then the reader can add details to what he or she feel like at the time (brother/sister, lovers, male/female, etc). I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'm glad I can say I enjoyed writing it and rereading it every time someone comments (which is hard for me to say)!

[rickm97]

Wonderful little piece, Kassie. Quite a pleasure to read.

[K.]

Thanks Rick!

[Stan Lee]

I really enjoyed this conversational piece. It had a lovely feel. They were obviously close to be discussing this so comfortably. Thanks for sharing :)

[K.]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Jamestown]

Well written and delivered

[K.]

Thank you, James, I'm glad you liked it.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

I often wondered about it. Interesting to read how others see it. I think for the most part everyone believes it is a wonderful place. Enjoyed the read!

[K.]

Thank you so much for reading a couple of my pieces, I really appreciate it! I wanted to portray a conversation maybe as someone standing outside of their conversation would see it, and also make it kind of vague, hence why I left out any "he said" "she said" things. Thank you again!

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Good job, I agree the he said / she said would take away from it.
You're welcome!