Bruises

  Isn't it interesting how the smallest things can remind of us the biggest memories? Ones that make our heart hurt like hell, or laugh to ourselves? Or make us feel like we're right back in that memory? Like when I see one of those motorcycles you had, I can feel the wind pulling hard through my hair, my hands wrapped around your stomach and your leather jacket soft on my cheek. Sometimes I step wrong on my foot and feel that twinge in my knee and I laugh because I remember that time we went hiking and I tore my acl and you carried me all the way back to the car.

 

I heard a couple fight yesterday, and then I was back in that apartment- the one with the yellow walls and the busted windows from when we had to break in because we were locked out. The apartment where everything started and ended; the words you and I said hit me like punches, and when I woke up this morning I could feel the bruises on my skin.

Author's Note

Once again I will say I hate the formatting on this website!! I don't know if I really like this all that much, but I wanted to get something up. Kind of hate myself for writing all this sappy, crap stuff and nothing really captivating, but at least I'm writing.

Might be deleted. Hope y'all like it alright.
Kass

Reviews

[Ronny]

Hey Kass.

I like it, as already written, there's not many words but it tells a whole story.
I guess the sappy things as you put it so nicely is often easier to put down on a "paper"
The feelings are usually hard and brutal and easier to verbalize.

I'm a Mc driver myself and the connection between two persons on a bike is amazing.
Loved that part.

Thanks for sharing :)

[K.]

Thank you, Ronny, and I totally agree! As much as I hate being sappy, it tends to evoke more feelings in the reader, I think, because mostly everyone can relate to it some way or another. Not everyone can relate to a battlefield or car crash.

Thanks for reading!!

[Lluvs]

Really powerful and felt the pain yet the adventure (: Pretty amazing

[K.]

I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading.

[Keith Charles]

Hello Kassie

I like the honesty in your writing. Life can certainly bring you pain when you least expect it and if you can write about it straight from the heart, your readers will know that you have lived your words.

[K.]

Hi Keith! I'm glad my writing came off as sincere as it did; I achieved my purpose! Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[Stan Lee]

I love it. The way you pull the reader in and say so much in so few words.
Thanks for sharing your story.
:)

[K.]

Thank you! I appreciate you reading and reviewing!

[Craig2591]

Well, I'm glad I saw it before you deleted it. This is wonderful! It is so true. I love the hidden story behind the story.

[K.]

Haha, maybe I won't delete it. Thank you (as always) for such a kind and thoughtful review! Miss being on here all the time!

[Coyote Poetry]

You said a lot in the short story.
"I heard a couple fight yesterday, and then I was back in that apartment- the one with the yellow walls and the busted windows from when we had to break in because we were locked out. The apartment where everything started and ended; the words you and I said hit me like punches, and when I woke up this morning I could feel the bruises on my skin."
Old places and similar situation can rebirth old pain and bruises. Thank you for sharing the powerful story.
Coyote

[K.]

I was going to make it a happy story for once, then I thought, "Who am I??" and made it sad and personal, haha. I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading and reviewing!!

[Coyote Poetry]

My pleasure to read your work and you are welcome.

[Jamestown]

Well penned!
I like this piece, memories shared and imagery is good,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[K.]

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Jamestown!