The Chipped Cup

The Chipped Cup

A Poem by K.

As she unloaded the washing basin,

her hands fumbled on the chipped cup.

To her, it meant

cold mornings with a warm cup,

with his lips on her forehead,

him saying, “I love you”, and that he always will.

But that turned out to be a lie.

To him, it only reminded him of her,

someone who he still loved,

but wished to forget.

© 2013 K.


Author's Note

K.
Couldn't decide if I liked it as a poem or a short story, but I tried to do it as poetry just as a change. Really pretty short. I might add more, but probably not. Sorry for being gone for a couple of days; this was all I could write. Thanks y'all!

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Oh wow! These words do speak a story, just simmering beneath the surface of the intricate images you wove together for us. How you spoke of a washing basin, my mind pictured some rustic cabin by the sea or in the mountains of Virginia with a lake as a back drop. Some place quite and cozy, steeped with memories and the cup was just a memories to sharp for the morning and her hands twitched a bit.

Great Poetry! I'm really enjoying the ink you've been crafting! Keep it up!
Aaron

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

K.

11 Years Ago

Yay! I'm so glad you pictured that! I was going for something a little behind the time and a dishwas.. read more



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Keep it as a poem. The title peaked my interesting. I wish you'd described the cup itself and a moment when he breaks off the relationship. I was disappointed with 'that turned out to be a lie'. I have a feeling you can do so much better.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

K.

10 Years Ago

For me, if I were to go into describing the cup and that moment, I think I would need to develop it .. read more
Persona

10 Years Ago

You're welcome. No, I like it as a poem. You can describe one element of the cup per line at a time... read more
K.

10 Years Ago

Okay, thank you.
if he still loved her why did he want to forget her?? intriguing write :) enjoyed and left me thinking! hehe

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

K.

10 Years Ago

That is the mystery, yes? Sorry I am responding so late, but thank you so much!
With his lip on her forehead
him saying ''i love you'' and that he always will
but that turned out to be a lie
Ooops what a player
nice and well arrenged poem

Posted 11 Years Ago


K.

11 Years Ago

Haha, thank you for reading and reviewing.
Love it! You are amazing!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

K.

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much Skye, I appreciate you reading and reviewing my stuff!
K.

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much Skye, I appreciate you reading and reviewing my stuff!
Skye Sparks

11 Years Ago

Absolutely! You are so welcome.
as a poem there are emotional ties that become apparent with the flow. As a short story many questions would be asked.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

K.

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing!
I agree that it's a bit vague, but I like vagueness, so it's okay as is. A nice little story that leaves you wondering.

I'm really bad with that 'who/whom' thing, but shouldn't it be, 'someone whom he still loved' ? I'm not sure.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

K.

11 Years Ago

Thank you! And I was wondering that too. I didn't know which one so I just chose one. But thanks, I'.. read more
Oh wow! These words do speak a story, just simmering beneath the surface of the intricate images you wove together for us. How you spoke of a washing basin, my mind pictured some rustic cabin by the sea or in the mountains of Virginia with a lake as a back drop. Some place quite and cozy, steeped with memories and the cup was just a memories to sharp for the morning and her hands twitched a bit.

Great Poetry! I'm really enjoying the ink you've been crafting! Keep it up!
Aaron

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

K.

11 Years Ago

Yay! I'm so glad you pictured that! I was going for something a little behind the time and a dishwas.. read more
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Sam
It is good but could be more. A little vague in places. But a lot of heart. Thank you for read request.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

K.

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading! Like I said, I was going to make it a story, but I wanted to try poet.. read more

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