in or out?

in or out?

A Poem by V M Smith

silent smiles still hiding pain
i'll drag you by the hand

show you my life, i'm hurt again
but i'm still not what you think i am

Open the closet and i sit down
"i'm hiding here, you understand?"

as i look down, you sit and say
"i'm hiding, too" and you kiss me.

© 2013 V M Smith


Author's Note

V M Smith
I fully appreciate reviews, especially when they tear apart my work in an attempt to make it better. Rip, tea, break it down. Tell me how you do not like it, how to make it better. I want your opinion. Truly.

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Hidden meanings, buried away, are always my favourite type of poems.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I really like this, and the ending of the poem is so sweet. It's like you're saying there is strength in numbers. No more hiding. Great job.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great piece! I loved this, it is so simple in wording yet complex in meaning, bravo!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on September 10, 2008
Last Updated on August 9, 2013
Tags: want, need, poem, love, relationship, hurt, lgbt, queer, lesbian, gay, closet, coming out, sweet

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i'm not a writer; i am a liar. i sometimes write far too specifically; i sometimes write so vague even i lose track of what it is i'm on about. i tend to write when i can't think. this seems to be.. more..

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