I'm the one that smiles

This was one solid block of text when I wrote it... I'm trying to find a way to break it up, but it's still in progress. Suggestions and critics, as always, welcome and encouraged.

I'm the one that smiles to hide her tears
hopes that tomorrow will bring less sorrow
and wants to find someone to love

I want to know that trust I see
that everyone seems to have

I want to know the love of family
years of memories fade
tomorrow is better than today
no one knows and it's okay
bleed again and hope for rain

depression hurts, just run away
and find somewhere to hide

sleepless nights filled with sighs
tears in the dark
wish for a spark in someone's mind
anything to remind them
that you live and die beside them
cross my heart and hope I don't cry
waste my time, make me rhyme it all away

let me fade, you lost me
then I'm leaving now
different views, same lines
it's in the perception
it's on the walls
bloody daggers line the halls
i'm sorry that I had to fall to wake you up
but that's just all I could think to do
it's time I tried something new
it's time you let me fade to
blue, black rings of nothing
white lights engulf
the lonely tangent

Author's Note

I fully appreciate reviews, especially when they tear apart my work in an attempt to make it better. Rip, tea, break it down. Tell me how you do not like it, how to make it better. I want your opinion. Truly.

Make suggestions, tear it apart, and tell me what you really think; no reservations.

Reviews

[Zachary Willis]

This is great. You can truly feel the pain and the emotion coming through your words. I would continue to work on breaking it up. Great job otherwise!