Here, you have a poem. I have a diary of sort where I only write all the F-words and the hell-words that comes to mind when I'm not feeling/doing/writing/accomplishing anything that is worth feeling/doing/writing/accomplishing. I was ashamed when I first wrote on that diary-of-sort and I was terribly anxious that someone might read it (note that my hell-words are oftentimes in BOLD letters and in RED pen). But then, I noticed that facing the war of the self head-on and without that awkward and very hindering pretense that all is well and that I am doing good, actually made me feel good fast, after all the BOLDs and the REDs were written. So I'm loving this note of yours. It's like you also have a diary-of-sort (a page torn, maybe), and I was allowed to read the hell-words and hell-thoughts. Good one. :)
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10 Years Ago
Conversations rattle around even when i'm shaving...dangerous!
Hahaha! That's because you're a writer, Bob! If we don't talk to ourselves, how are we ever going to.. read moreHahaha! That's because you're a writer, Bob! If we don't talk to ourselves, how are we ever going to write? haha. Be careful picking a fight when shaving, though. :)
Here, you have a poem. I have a diary of sort where I only write all the F-words and the hell-words that comes to mind when I'm not feeling/doing/writing/accomplishing anything that is worth feeling/doing/writing/accomplishing. I was ashamed when I first wrote on that diary-of-sort and I was terribly anxious that someone might read it (note that my hell-words are oftentimes in BOLD letters and in RED pen). But then, I noticed that facing the war of the self head-on and without that awkward and very hindering pretense that all is well and that I am doing good, actually made me feel good fast, after all the BOLDs and the REDs were written. So I'm loving this note of yours. It's like you also have a diary-of-sort (a page torn, maybe), and I was allowed to read the hell-words and hell-thoughts. Good one. :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Conversations rattle around even when i'm shaving...dangerous!
Hahaha! That's because you're a writer, Bob! If we don't talk to ourselves, how are we ever going to.. read moreHahaha! That's because you're a writer, Bob! If we don't talk to ourselves, how are we ever going to write? haha. Be careful picking a fight when shaving, though. :)
I've known my share of self-absorbed, backbiting people lately; people who view others as commodities, rather than flesh and blood. I do believe I've had similar reactions. Nice piece!
If you don't mind me pointing it out, there are two typos. when your rotting / your f*****g (both should be you're) I don't know much about poetry and you might have done so for the sake of syllables, but anyway I thought I mention it.
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10 Years Ago
Hey,not a problem,I probably wasn't paying an awful lot of attention!
Sounds like my internal conversations I have with myself sometimes Bob. Very funny, but stern as well. Good write!
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10 Years Ago
Agreed.As I said to Lourisa,I find myself doing this a little to often these days! A little self ana.. read moreAgreed.As I said to Lourisa,I find myself doing this a little to often these days! A little self analysis goes a long way..or the wrong way?
Ah yes, those lovely talks we have with that best friend/greatest enemy we harbour within ourselves. Great write!
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10 Years Ago
Hey Lourisa,thanks..the older I get,the more I find myself staring in disgust at what's looking back.. read moreHey Lourisa,thanks..the older I get,the more I find myself staring in disgust at what's looking back!
LMFAO! on a serious note, what happened to your modesty? LOL! Just kidding! Guess we need to slap ourselves in the face once in a while. i like your work, you're real. Raw, pessimistic, straight forward-real.
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10 Years Ago
Ha! it was something i was thinking about the other day while shaving and had a wee laugh to myself... read moreHa! it was something i was thinking about the other day while shaving and had a wee laugh to myself.thanks for reading.