Where once you slept

Have to stop losing girfriends!

Tear stain branded on the pillowcase,

A smear of mascarra drawn down.

Where you once slept.

Vague smell of your scent languishes and floats,

like a cloud,lost and turning darker by the minute.

I still see you lying there half asleep,half smiling.

Eyes aching to open,the sunlight winning the battle,

for you to keep them shut,tight.

Reviews

[Jeanmarie Flaherty]

I know this. The leftover scent, fingers trailing down sheets where a body used to lie. It's heartbreak defined.


So incredibly beautiful.

[Bob Sherunkle]

Thank you,that was very kind.

[Jeanmarie Flaherty]

You're very welcome :)

[Gio S.P.]

Hey, I really like the metaphors being presented in this poem. I can envision the story being told here clearly. Great job, man!

[Bob Sherunkle]

Many thanks my friend.Much appreciated.I like to keep it short,as I said to a few of the other guys,I'll forget what i'm writing ! Look forward tou reading more of your work.

[Sami Khalil]

A hint of sadness in this lovely poem...:).............

[Bob Sherunkle]

Sami,many thanks for reading this.I appreciate your comments

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)........................