listen? me? no...

mummy said we mustn't touch that

        ouch

it burns, it burns

please stop hurting me

 

mummy said we mustn't touch that

        ouch

it kills. it kills

please stop hurting me

 

mummy said we mustn't touch that

        ouch

mummy.

said.

we mustn't.

touch.

that. 

Reviews

[KatiePie]

This seems sexual to me, repressed sexual tension.

[Blossom]

wow. I'd like to know the story behind that. that was so powerful. I like the repetition it makes so beautiful and chilling.

[EMP]

simple, short but very powerful.
it makes you want to know more about the story behind this poem. love it. well done.

[Akshat♥]

this is different kind of poem...i liked it...
nice concept...good imaginery:)

[Chilson, Joshua]

This reminds me of when a mother tells thier children not to touch the stovetop as it will burn. Could be well wrong, but I like the write. Good job.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

well drawn chilling little poetic bite that gets the reader's imagination churning!~

[Julie Beth]

this is really good great job :)

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mummy was right..you shouldn't touch that..although there is that innate button inside us all that if you tell us not to do something..it's like an itch..you just have to scratch it!!! LOL

[Hellslastwarrior]

MAnnnnnn I'm liking this ya know is there something specific that must not be touched or is it like an illusion of one's worst fear??? I loved this I had so many different pictures for each stanza- can garentee your gunna get some ncie feedback bobbeeeeeet!!!!!!
100rate form me!