without you, im still me

see, and swallow hard at what you know you couldve had,

witness & bare the consequence of a broken heart inside your hands.

you dont breathe to know youre alive,

you breathe to know im still here.

as long as i go where you stay near,

unconsciously following the same pathway,

you dont stand down your guard.

witness me without you, doing fine,

think of how we couldve been & where we'd be at this point in time,

together, alone, whatever it be.

i wonder if its rough for you, knowing that you lost me.

Author's Note

lowercase in intended, idgaf about correct punctuation or anything lol

Reviews

[cara]

this is my favorite kind of poem. your writing feels so deeply personal, and the flow is really cool to read
(also, huge fan of the lowercase)

[ashley]

thank you so much ! i really really appreciate your comment :-)

i also love the lowercase hahaha, it feels more emotional to me in a weird way, and it also looks more 'even'

[Vol]

Ashley,
One of the things that many think about poetry is that it should follow certain restrictions Sonnets look like this, Haiku like that, Elegy, Sestina, whatever... e e cummings set a horrible example so half the poets on here feel as though they somehow have added a level of skill when they copy his technique. You actually have the skill to pull it off, I've yet to read another who does... good job!
Vol