Monstrous Insanity

We're the same you know

Same face

Same sins

Same twisted smile

Cracking through our faces

So much the same 

We are like the same person

We are the same person

You are me

I am you

Like a mirror

It is a mirror

Gleaming back

Giggling insanely

No one is here

You are your only friend

No one is here

You are your own monster

Monstrous Insanity

Reviews

[DaughterNature]

This is interesting, I like the repetitions with slight changes. But, I think you may have found the phrase "monstrous insanity" and liked it so much you wanted to use it, but didn't quite make it there. The line "You are your own monster" is a bit of a shock (as are the lines directly preceding it) -- there doesn't seem to be much transition from the similarities to the monstrosity. Remember that words are only as powerful as you allow them to be, and since "monster" is a little vague (what do YOU mean by "monster" vs. what do I think when I hear "monster"), you need to make sure that you bring your reader to the very end of the poem with you in your thought processes.

[Chris]

THIS one felt right. It tastes of you in the word choice and its rhythm and flow. Smooth transitions.