Down Deep

 

You know who you are

Look deep down in your heart

But you can’t erase your scars

And as everything is falling apart

It’s time for me to depart

 

I’m lost in my own world

Where nothing seems to hurt

Is this really heaven

But now I’m starting to feel the burn

The smoke from the Coles

Make it too hard to breathe

 

Every road is dead

I guess you don’t have good advice

You have to remember what I said

This is my only life

But I need to change

And I am here to stay

 

Never knew being on my own

Would bring the best out of me

I will do anything

Just to have something

I know that I will do great

And I won’t give in or run away

 

I wish that there is something that I can do

But all I can do is run to you

I don’t want to let you down

I didn’t want you to find out

it is something i don't want you to know

Reviews

[The dark story]

You know who you are
Look deep down in your heart
But you can’t erase your scars
And as everything is falling apart
It’s time for me to depart

i like this line the most...imagine if the starting could touch your heart so quickly.then forget about the whole poem... infinity likes!!!!!!!!!1

[Brandon Mathis]

thank you so much im honored that u like it so much

[Sir Joe]

You attached yourself to the poem too much. Detach yourself a little bit. That might help you connect with the readers. (=
I love the way you poured your emotion into the poem.
In the first stanza you mentioned "it's time for me to depart" and in the latter part you also mentioned about not running away,,,,which is which?
Nice poem though (=

[Brandon Mathis]

thank you not many people have told something like that before thanks reads some more and say what ever you want about it seriously i love opinions help me out a lot thank you

[Sir Joe]

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