Suffering Angels

This style is called Pantoum and i really like this style.

All alone I hear the angels scream

My thoughts are buried underground

The amount of dust is making it hard to breathe

There are pieces of it scattered all around

 

My thoughts are buried underground

What are you afraid of?

You’re speaking with-out any sound

Drifting through the darkness beyond the sun

 

What are you afraid of?

Take my breath before it slips away

The angels are screaming they have lost our trust

Banned here for life with no escape

 

Take my breath before it slips away

There are so many things that I can’t believe

I didn’t mean to trap them here it was a mistake

So the angels suffer as they scream

Reviews

[Serenity Faith]

Ok just WoW and I mean....WOOOOOW! This is definitely my favorite from you. The description in this piece is absolutely brilliant! Very sad, but brilliant. I'm definitely trying this style of poetry sometime soon. Not only did you try something different that inspired you, but you held a superb flow with rhyme. And this piece is definietly going to my favorites. Excellent Brandon! ^_^

[Brandon Mathis]

I'm so honored that you put this as your favorite thank you very much

[emilythestrange]

A tale of sadness and death... very sad, very brilliant, and it reminds me of something that Emily Bronte might write( SHE IS ALIVE IN ME! SHE IS ALIVE!)

[ewest1220]

Love the title and the repetition of the line "Take my breath before it slips away. Beautiful my friend.

[Brandon Mathis]

thanks for the review man

[quixotic_rose]

This style is awesome in itself. Your own ideas and text added into the pattern just make it absolutely brilliant in its own rights. Its as though you take certain aspects of life and symbolize them in your work. awesome job, creative as well :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

A dark tale of regred and despair. I've never heard of this stsyle, but it was a nice piece! So thank you for introducing pantoum to me:)
God bless

[Crimson Bayonet]

Breath-taking! But can I have my breath back? :D

[Brandon Mathis]

well im glad u like it

[Skye]

I love the way its written, not just the way you wrote it, but the style to. Second, I adore this poem, even though its sad, it also holds a meaning. Beautifully written.

[Brandon Mathis]

thank you very much the style is called Pantoum check it out its fun to do

[Skye]

Will do :)