Satisfied

I think I need to relax

Before I begin to collapse

The air in my lungs is starting to attack

The lighting has been striking

And the fire is extracted

In my eyes do I look satisfied?

When the whole world turns to black

 

Stop this world

Before it all seeps in and starts to hurt

Pull me down, hold me till I drown

I watch as your smile turns to a frown

Do you feel satisfied now?

Dig me my grave,

Put me underground

 

I don’t know if there’s anywhere to run

I have ran so much,

I have lost every bit of the sun

And I think I might come undone

Who are you and who have you become?

Will you be satisfied when you see blood?

 

Is your heart that cold?

Satisfied with your own blackened world to show

I’m so young but your hurt makes me old

Just one of many that you steal for your own

Take our lives and shatter our hope

Leaving us in your dark world to call our home

Do you feel satisfied now?

Now that I’m here all alone

Reviews

[ewest1220]

You are always incredibly good at describing pain and hurt and this piece is no exception! Great job!

[Brandon Mathis]

my world is surrounded in pain so it comes easy

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

wow, amazing.. the pain of being left alone is described so well here.. loved it from start to end!

[Brandon Mathis]

Thank you very much for the review

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

my pleasure!

[The dark story]

hmmmmmmmmm.....the diction,and the visual imagery is just superb........a very nice poem..........(control+v for evrything i have said before in your outstanding poems)..........CELL NET EX!!!!!!!

[Brandon Mathis]

I try to put a lot of imaginary in all my poems but i think this one speaks the most of all.

[The dark story]

answer my question please..i'm loving this game!!:)

[Brandon Mathis]

I have no idea?

[The dark story]

excellent!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Brandon Mathis]

you wont tell or is excellent the word?

[The dark story]

come on.........excellent is the word!!!!

[Serenity Faith]

WoW! A very very deep write. One of your bests and definitely my favorite. A very powerful piece. Nicely done ^_^

[Brandon Mathis]

thank you im glad its one of your favorite

[TheJordBaker]

powerful stuff. again, effortlessly written. keep it up man, quality.

[Brandon Mathis]

thanks rite on