Your Love Torture Me

too much emotions put in a poem..I am never good at poetry..ha ha Some thoughts just wanted to get out,so i let them out ,ha ha

 

You brought me to life,and what life

You showed me beauties,i longed to see

Tell me how you manage this ,i really lost my way

Is there no way out of you,you really trapped me in this

Tell me is your love was made to torment ,but love the way you do it

Please never stop..I like the way you torture me

You brought a new meaning to love,your words showed some new lives

Wonder how you do it..magician surely you are

You haunted me day and night..is there no way to cut you out

How sweet everything is about you,even with the pains and aches you bring

How you play with my heart ..but I feel it as the biggest pleasure I ever known

What are ,who are you,those words and thoughts shook my world,my whole being

Thoughts of you jump to my mind all the time..is just there no cure from you

 

Author's Note

no rules what so ever

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow... simply love the honesty in your emotions.. we are many things as people.. it's a daily struggle.. good and bad.. some people pull us like magnets and I have felt that affect a time or too. Part of being human is having so many emotions, feelings and beliefs.. we fall.. get up.. there are no rules when it comes to matters of the heart.. we can only feel what is true to us and our surroundings.. but still hold high a dream.. a fantasy.. a belief.. a love.. a passion.. you display you have lost your way.. many have.. I have more than once.. part of being human. Your surroundings displayed; through what you have written previously; shows it would be very easy to lose your way.. being in such harsh territory. I am glad you found someone who still challenges your being.. for that is life itself through living and those we know and hold dear. Love can be such torment.. and joy.. and so many things!!! Thank you for sharing... love your honesty my friend and may your heart find peace, understanding and it's own divine love! Myself I chose to end my days in peace and love even though it pains sometimes! =)

[Meredith Leigh]

This is really cool, it's almost like you're having a banter with yourself. I liked the deep emotion that was SO visable in this peom. Lovely work!

- Kriss

[Gheeneil]

Love itself is a powerful emotion. It could torture and haunt us. However, I like the thought of trapped by love. Perhaps, that's what you meant by being "tortured". Nice one.

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This write is so filled with emotions
And i know how it is to be haunted .. haunted of love is one thing, and being haunted by someone who loved, and broke you is another - really painful
The way you expressed your feelings are wonderful
I also like the way in which you relate her love into a sweet torture
Great write
i love it!

[Jinx's Heart]

Such honesty with a jumble of emotions scrambling throughout this poem. It really has me thinking of what has this person to tortured. I can feel the hopeful, high feeling that is received at first, but also the uncertainty that causes the one to feel challenged. You leave a very raw feeling. Nice piece.

[ICE]

Ah, love. I can absolutely relate to this. Having someone who still makes you want to be a better person...who keeps you on your feet and shows you new things.

[Tabitha Dings]

This is... well I know it's a cliche to say this, but this is sweet. I mean, it's a poem of tortured obsession... love yes. But possibly... misguided love? It feels like a trap, no way to escape the tormenting love that binds you to this person. I think you've captured it very well.

[Cherry Berry]

This is a piece full of deep thought and emotion. I enjoyed reading the thoughts you have expressed here. Nicely writtten.
xox
Cherri

[Gregory Hill]

It shows a lot of emotion that clearly comes from the heart. I like it but you could make it much better if you simply changed a few lines and made them rhyme, though that is really just my preference. Arigato Gozimas (Thank You)

[Ellen Hammond]

This write is really packed with emotion! Sometimes love may seem to torture us, but true love should ease many pains. You may have thrown out the rules but you speak from the heart, my friend.