Your Love Torture Me

too much emotions put in a poem..I am never good at poetry..ha ha Some thoughts just wanted to get out,so i let them out ,ha ha

 

You brought me to life,and what life

You showed me beauties,i longed to see

Tell me how you manage this ,i really lost my way

Is there no way out of you,you really trapped me in this

Tell me is your love was made to torment ,but love the way you do it

Please never stop..I like the way you torture me

You brought a new meaning to love,your words showed some new lives

Wonder how you do it..magician surely you are

You haunted me day and night..is there no way to cut you out

How sweet everything is about you,even with the pains and aches you bring

How you play with my heart ..but I feel it as the biggest pleasure I ever known

What are ,who are you,those words and thoughts shook my world,my whole being

Thoughts of you jump to my mind all the time..is just there no cure from you

 

Author's Note

no rules what so ever

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow... simply love the honesty in your emotions.. we are many things as people.. it's a daily struggle.. good and bad.. some people pull us like magnets and I have felt that affect a time or too. Part of being human is having so many emotions, feelings and beliefs.. we fall.. get up.. there are no rules when it comes to matters of the heart.. we can only feel what is true to us and our surroundings.. but still hold high a dream.. a fantasy.. a belief.. a love.. a passion.. you display you have lost your way.. many have.. I have more than once.. part of being human. Your surroundings displayed; through what you have written previously; shows it would be very easy to lose your way.. being in such harsh territory. I am glad you found someone who still challenges your being.. for that is life itself through living and those we know and hold dear. Love can be such torment.. and joy.. and so many things!!! Thank you for sharing... love your honesty my friend and may your heart find peace, understanding and it's own divine love! Myself I chose to end my days in peace and love even though it pains sometimes! =)

[Nickle]

i rlly love how true this poem is i liked how u made it a bittersweet type of poem; just like how love rlly is...this poem was very heart felt...nice write :)

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

of course you know how to write poetry .. this poem is amazing .. i love it!!!!!!

[funeralmoon]

very good i like how you felt trapped by this woman.. its very appealing to read stuff like this.. good job

[Weaza]

Wow. Your amazing!!! I love the poem. All the energy all the emotions seem like they are clashing! Its very very good! I love how you described everything clearly, but also in a blurred way. Like to show/tell the reader that its bad but good. I love this poem! Its going in my library! Continue Writing!

~Weaza~

[The Flawed]

I like this, it's very honest,
And I can relate to the pure and unconditional love that it talks about, the kind that makes you feel deaf dumb and blind.
The 5th line (Tell me is your love was made to torment) should it not be (Tell me if your love was made to torment)?
But what do I know
good job well done.

[LeeAnne Elizabeth]

Love this! It's really good. It's exactly how I feel and that makes it even better. Good job!

[Jennifer Marie Theresa ..]

This poem was unbelievable. I can connect so well with this believe me. I love how the narrator recognizes the love given and the curse of it as if the narrator is losing to love yet loving every second of it. Amazing poem.

[Lisa Verdon]

Why do we persist in chasing love when it causes us so much turmoil? Because without it, we are nothing.
Love can be splendid and magical and painful and awful all at once. But the end result is worth the struggle =]

"Love is from the infinite, and will remain until eternity.
The seeker of love escapes the chains of birth and death.
Tomorrow, when resurrection comes,
The heart that is not in love will fail the test."

From Thief of Sleep (Rumi)
and translated by Shahram Shiva

[Samantha]

i enjoyed it! i liked how some of the words were phrased, it made me think of Yoda kinda. i can relate to this poem, so it brought out feeligns and emotions which i enjoy in a poem. Great job!

[BLACKCRUSH]

Love is one of those things that gets into your mind,body and soul.This piece was full of so many emotions and imagery.I really love how you didn't hold back on the characters inner struggle, it was well written and I think you did a wonderful job.