As She Walked

this a review to my friend Sheila Kline..she liked it and asked me to post it..and here it is

i see those eyes..men with weakness will look and sigh
men who are strong ..so they think ..will go weak and fly
after those eyes those ruby lips..that will take off their mind
she is a woman of passion set out to kill all weak hearts
never ready for such a sight ..she took them by surprise
that kind of walk..calculated in every move
each has a rythm..one to follow the other
each move has a purpose..the eyes will follow
the invitation so clear.. come watch me from near
the body will sway with taste..the mind will go astray
she knows how to dress..to show every curve to the very best
and even more..the curves looking more curvy..the walk
like this ground has never been walked on before ..taking breaths with each pace she takes
all eyes fixed could never turn away ..such a sight will never repeat itself every day
her fragrance filling the air..the whole block
sending men wild and mad..they have seen the face ..the ruby lips ..the wild eyes
body swaying in a move like no one ever moved like this..like the earth shook underneath
the air vibrated so strong just could not handle that walk

Author's Note

a review turned to a writing ha ha ..i am not really a poet..my friend Sheila Kline asked me to post it as it was a review to one of her great writings ..actually her writing was the thing that inspired me to write this

Reviews

[JohnL]

Hello again Moayad (I hope you don't mind my use of your name)
This is a wonderful poem. It offers many different interpretations. The first that springs to mind is the seeking of men under stress and duress for release in the arms of a seductive and available woman. But that is the simple reading. 'Getting' the woman could represent the obsessive aspiration of men to have power and the woman the seductive appeal which leads men on to follow and seek to win her whereupon she becomes the ultimate power and leads them into death - a siren, - die Lorelei to escape whom, yet still participate, the strong men tie themselves to the mast but still hear the singing without submitting to fate. All very profound - perhaps not what you meant at all. That is one of the beauties of poetry. It means what we see in it. This is unusual for me! I normally see the happy side in verse. In this I have had a balanced view and have seemingly gone deeper. I would like to read some of the work of Shiela Kline. Where do I find her?
I hope GOOD THINGS happen to you in the New Year Moayad,
God Bless you,
John

[Gheeneil]

So this is the move that makes every man a woman's tail. Worst, if it kills them. I dunno but I found humor in this piece.

[Ellen Hammond]

Not a poet????? Well, my friend, you did indeed prove that statement was wrong. This is a poem well worth the time to read. Interesting style and rhyming. It is hard to choose only a few lines I really like because it is all so intriguing. These stand out to me...at least in this reading....perhaps others will jump out at me each time.

each move has a purpose..the eyes will follow
the invitation so clear.. come watch me from near
the body will sway with taste..the mind will go astray
she knows how to dress..to show every curve to the very best

Very good write. Our friend Sheila, really is good at spotting and encouraging a good writer. Thanks for sharing this.

[Sean M. Addams]

very creative piece very nicely done .... very strong meaning in this... overall great job!!!

[Bethany Woody]

I'm thinking one of those slow motion scence for a movie or comercial where you see the hot chick do "The Walk" and then she falls flat on her face. I I'm glad you left the fall out of this piece. It is creativly writen, not as stanzas and rhymed lines, I think that gives it something extra. It hasa really great flow to it, kinda like "The Walk" hasa great flow, specific steps to follow to make it really work.

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

THAT WAS SOOOOOOOO HOT!!!!!!! I'm so mad that I didn't think of a lot of the s**t you wrote in here.

"come watch me from near
the body will sway with taste..the mind will go astray
she knows how to dress..to show every curve to the very best
and even more..the curves looking more curvy..the walk
like this ground has never been walked on before ..taking breaths with each pace she takes
all eyes fixed could never turn away ..such a sight will never repeat itself every day
her fragrance filling the air.."

So, so inspiring! You are incredible!!! If you're not writing poetry, you should be! This would be such a great spoken word piece, but the paper version is extraordinary! ENTER THE LIBRARY!!!!

[ANNA]

You are a wonderful poet m friend ! and I love reading your work when I'm stressed. You bring air to my dry state of mind. You write very well and inspirited many of us on here! So thank you..

Much love n respect,
Anna

all eyes fixed could never turn away ..such a sight will never repeat itself every day
her fragrance filling the air..the whole block
sending men wild and mad..they have seen the face ..the ruby lips ..the wild eyes
body swaying in a move like no one ever moved like this..like the earth shook underneath
the air vibrated so strong just could not handle that walk

AMAZING ENDING!!

[Nix]

Blimey! I think I know a few of these women, always stealing my thunder! :) I enjoyed the format, the rhyming which was very clever by the way, and the image it portrayed. needless to say, I enjoyed this very much!

Ps. I have a poem called High Heels and Glad rags which has a similar tone to it. Actually in my slight obsession with shoes! Will post it later.

[Kelley]

Strong and sexy! All the women want this at one part in their life lol
Great write Blues!
Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Emily B]

this is a beautiful, all the girls want to be this woman, sometimes . . .

[Spoken]

wow.. this type of woman could ravish someone! Not a poet.. posh.. this was phenomenol and i hope you keep writing poems!

she knows how to dress..to show every curve to the very best
and even more..the curves looking more curvy..the walk
like this ground has never been walked on before ..

my favorite lines.