As She Walked

this a review to my friend Sheila Kline..she liked it and asked me to post it..and here it is

i see those eyes..men with weakness will look and sigh
men who are strong ..so they think ..will go weak and fly
after those eyes those ruby lips..that will take off their mind
she is a woman of passion set out to kill all weak hearts
never ready for such a sight ..she took them by surprise
that kind of walk..calculated in every move
each has a rythm..one to follow the other
each move has a purpose..the eyes will follow
the invitation so clear.. come watch me from near
the body will sway with taste..the mind will go astray
she knows how to dress..to show every curve to the very best
and even more..the curves looking more curvy..the walk
like this ground has never been walked on before ..taking breaths with each pace she takes
all eyes fixed could never turn away ..such a sight will never repeat itself every day
her fragrance filling the air..the whole block
sending men wild and mad..they have seen the face ..the ruby lips ..the wild eyes
body swaying in a move like no one ever moved like this..like the earth shook underneath
the air vibrated so strong just could not handle that walk

Author's Note

a review turned to a writing ha ha ..i am not really a poet..my friend Sheila Kline asked me to post it as it was a review to one of her great writings ..actually her writing was the thing that inspired me to write this

Reviews

[JohnL]

Hello again Moayad (I hope you don't mind my use of your name)
This is a wonderful poem. It offers many different interpretations. The first that springs to mind is the seeking of men under stress and duress for release in the arms of a seductive and available woman. But that is the simple reading. 'Getting' the woman could represent the obsessive aspiration of men to have power and the woman the seductive appeal which leads men on to follow and seek to win her whereupon she becomes the ultimate power and leads them into death - a siren, - die Lorelei to escape whom, yet still participate, the strong men tie themselves to the mast but still hear the singing without submitting to fate. All very profound - perhaps not what you meant at all. That is one of the beauties of poetry. It means what we see in it. This is unusual for me! I normally see the happy side in verse. In this I have had a balanced view and have seemingly gone deeper. I would like to read some of the work of Shiela Kline. Where do I find her?
I hope GOOD THINGS happen to you in the New Year Moayad,
God Bless you,
John

[Lizanne]

You did a wonderful job with this piece. I could actually visualize the woman. Felt as if I could see the whole scene happening. Have observed men watching a woman in this way. You describe it perfectly!

[Britteny]

What a wonderful piece! It sure sounds like a poem to me!!! I do seem to notice that your reviews often turn into poetry themselves...I even encourage you to take the comment you posted on my piece and turn it into a piece of lovely poetry!!! Thanks for the review and the wonderful read!!!

[Sel Whiteley]

It is so strange how love makes you see things anew, you really capture the woman's grace and elegance in this poem. It reads like such a classical, traditional love poem. I really like it.

[shythatway]

"the invitation so clear.. come watch me from near".. *smiles* I really enjoyed this. Both the descriptions and the form. Lovely.

[Alya Usman]

The flow is appreciable. However, your work has many punctuation and capitalization problems.

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What a review haha! Well done then!

Beautifully detailed

My favorite:
"the invitation so clear.. come watch me from near
the body will sway with taste..the mind will go astray
she knows how to dress..to show every curve to the very best"

I loved it, well penned!

[Anastasia Starlena]

excellent piece. I loved the romance and the flow to this piece. It draws the reader in with a breathtaking type dream.

[Cherrie Palmer]

That is how a poet is born , something seen or red gives live to the pen. Nice Job Cherrie

[An owl on the moon]

Powerful description of beauty used for devastating purposes... Moving like a siren of ancient times, luring men to their destruction and madness. Amazing work, friend...

[Winter McPherson]

Wow.....you've really defined a woman's walk quite well here and the captivating allure it holds upon men. Nicely done........I liked it!