AND I LOVED AGAIN

i thought i was immune ,i had wisdom i joked at myself ,but you said you loved me ,you never loved me,oh the fool i was

 

had a dreamy tranquil life

Sleepy happy graceful nights                                                                                   used to love me all my life and rejoiced

In being wonderfully alive                                                                                       used to love everything I did

Never for once did i regret

My walk through lanes of life was steady strides

Full of joy laughs all dreams

Serene Thoughts I had piece with me

Myself I loved and...and then I loved her... I just fell... and loved her

Yes she came full into my life

I told me love was not for me,no... no more for your bones getting old and cold

Never ready for aches and breaks and... tremulence

I had never known for I liked simply my life free and no

Worries restraints, where then she came even bad dreams

Things I never known before 

You said you will fill my life to brim with joy I never known

I rejoiced for a while at everything yes,

I lived everything I saw and ready to break the peace I always known

For I loved again i cried yes,aloud i loved again, yes I broke my oath again and again...  ............................                  

Stirred every wave in my being, I was not ready for

Is love always torment, or it's only you, the more I come to you

You come to me, shaking all grounds under my feet, why me

You say you loved me you died for me and I felt it???death only for me

So why I feel tormented... all the while

You sit by me and I dream of that lovely face but oh soul you always

Told get away for fire knows nothing but to burn and mess with your peace

I say I want to feel it one more time, even if to my demise then i go, I know

She offered me a lot but I saw nothing but wild fire coming !!!

I like to get warmth but you sound like you also... made an oath to break every part... of me

Is love really so cruel, as I never known 

Oh the fool I am I told myself again and again stay away, stay away

But you will never leave me be for you said, come here, I told you, she said I loved you

Silly what more my youth I gave, I want it back

What? You do not want to die,but i am your death

To be continued...

 

 

Ibsen the dramatist once came to land of Arabia, he was enchanted at the charm he saw ,he loved a young lass, she lured me ,she danced ,he saw the beauty and was happy ,but all suddenly she came to laugh at him ,you fool she said ,you old you thought you dreamed and kept laughing, so he just gathered his clothes and walked away, from the deep snow then to the Sahara then back again to the freezing cold, he walked wisely away ,laughing,thinking i was a joke...

 

Author's Note

i just loved that dramatist IBSEN and the way he pictured how he, the wise and know it all, was fooled by a small Arab girl,it was so symbolic i could hardly catch his meaning...,she lured him ,danced for him until he was full in love and dozed and fell asleep,but she took the chance,she laughed at him and ran away,like making fun of him,from the freezing cold he came to the hot Sahara ,he found magic and found her,he was a fool ,then back to the icy cold he strolled back,laughing all the way

Reviews

[Bubo]

A very strong piece.............packed to the brim with emotions we have all felt.........this really struck a
chord with me

Stirred every wave in my being, I was not ready for

Is love always torment, or it's only you, the more I come to you

You come to me, shaking all grounds under my feet, why me


It is how I felt a year ago........and that pain never seems to ebb, even in the happiest of moments,
and the sadness is that we lose faith............you write with tremendous feeling.

[Gandré]

I lived everything I saw and ready to break the peace I always known

For I loved again i cried yes,aloud i loved again, yes I broke my oath again and again...
--------this had a nice rhyme. I liked the passionate desiring of this divine love..and how naturally you formed your thoughts. nicely written !

[Barbara Walker]

Oh this is so full of emotion! I can feel all the strength that was in that oath, to have a peaceful life, not upset it, but the attraction to her is so strong, it just pulls you in-"What more my youth I gave, I want it back"-love that line and "serene thoughts, I had peace with me".
I would suggest using punctuation to help the reader know exactly where the end of thought is. Otherwise, different meanings may be understood. For instance, lines 5 and 6 and 7.If you put a period at the end of line six, line 7 would make sense as it it. But if you put a comma after line 6, line 7 would read,
"my walk through lanes of life WITH steady strides. And are you saying you had no regrets for the walk of steady strides or is no regrets referring to the lines 1 through 4? I hope I am making myself understood or had a much clearer example to give you. Punctuation aside, it's a great poem and I enjoyed reading it. Barbara

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Very nicely written poem. Great job. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Mysty Rayn]

Wow. Blown away again by another great write of yours. Fantastic.

[Emily B]

The love for the idea shows in every line, every word. I was caught up in the agony or ecstasy of the loving. I believed in her existence. I knew she must haunt you day and night. Never should we take a poet's words for his life. Too many try to draw conclusions about our private selves that way.

[alternative_be]

Well, I cannot wait to read the next part ... Love can tear us a part, love can be kind, love can be cruel. Sometimes it is even said that you have to be cruel to be kind. I love the drama and duality expressed in your work so far and after reading this, I feel I should read Ibsen, for your poem has got a theme in it, also often to be found in old Greek poetry: the juxtaposition of 'eros' (love) and 'thanatos' (death)
Very intriguing, please keep developing this wonderful onset to a long epic poem!