this damned life

just read please

life is like a shimmering light,you sitting in a deep empty tunnel,sitting and waiting
for what you never know,she would not let you know,just keeping you waiting and hoping,
and looking for that light,so if you are to get bored,and fed up ,there comes,that light
again,its like stalling you,like telling you there is always something worth waiting,but you will get only the little that i give you,
its like immersing you deap underwater,,once you cant hold your breath longer,suddenly you burst out of water,and
enjoy a bolus of fresh air and,and shimmering light of the sweet warm sun,but not for long

for you are going down again my freind,,life says,no one is released from my clucthes,i am
the boss here you are my slave,i will give you what i want,no more no less,only enough to keep you going

Author's Note

all reviews welcome

Reviews

[Aethereal]

Life is the Universe's perception of itself. We are life. Time, space, motion, pleasure, pain are all illusions generated by a process within the Universe that we call mind. Reality for us is an event array of probable permutations to be perceived in bits and pieces, a puzzle to be assembled, and a collection of conscious logical assumptions based upon limited empirical knowledge that may or may not enable us to survive as a process that enables the Universe to know itself. Truth is that which contributes to the survival of the process! Truth becomes beauty.

[bluessadmood]

thanks again for taking part of your time to read this..

[slfisher89]

Interesting monologue; why the numerous commas? Not semi colons or periods? For continued pauses? Are you going for stream of consciousness?

[bluessadmood]

Thank you so much for reading.

[Gilad Levanon]

The only reason we are unable to hold onto that brief glimpse of beauty that life gives us is because we are trapped in our own illusion of time. Next time life casts you a glimpse of the light, stay with it. Don't think about staying with it, don't place it in the mistaken context between past and future, because it is when we live in the past or the future that we fail to see the light. The light is not at the end of the tunnel, but rather right here, right now. Your belief that it lies at the end of the tunnel prevents you from reaching it. At least that's what I've found so far. Excellent poem.

[MR_BERG]

Far too deep for my shallow brain. I love the pictures your words paint.

[Vanessa Whiteley]

A strong write and that is a very powerful ending.

[Helena]

This was great Moayad! I love how you likened life to "a deep empty tunnel".
Life gives us glimpes of happiness and then drops us back down again emersing
us into deep water to sink or survive.

Yes, we usually come to the surface again unbeliveably in some cases when
one would think it absolutely impossible:

"once you cant hold your breath longer,suddenly you burst out of water,and
enjoy a bolus of fresh air and,and shimmering light of the sweet warm sun,but not for long"

I like that lively and descriptive line... in fact I liked the whole write!

Bravo

Helena

[Angel's Lady]

life is like a shimmering light -- Very, very true...
This damned life - I even liked the title!

wow, this isn't that sparing really is it? Gives you a bit of a reality check- "no more no less,only enough to keep you going" thats a good line- good write!:D xx