unseen

i wouldnt say i am an attention seeker
i just wish someone would notice me
notice why ive been gone for so long
why ive been quiet

people are all around me
but no one can hear my voice
its like i am screaming underwater
as i watch everyone walk away from me
while i am slowly drowning

my feelings are pushed aside
making me feel as if i were a ghost
people walking right through me
as if im almost completely invisible
but im not
im right here
why cant anyone see that

it feels as though truly nobody cares
someday soon
im gonna disappear
and you wont have any idea
what happened to me

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

Depressingly true, creatively sad

Good read

With love

Matthew

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I have felt this many times...all alone in a crowd...
in my own world. Is it because we poets are misunderstood by so many...
or our world is something they don't want to bother with.
maybe.
this write has power.
j.

[Kim S.]

I have went through this before Myself, but I pulled myself out of it, especially after the loss of my parents. Touching write.

[Chris]

"Hi."

Seems you've reached the point of understanding the WHY social media seems so important to those that have yet to find their own "footing" in this world we ALL live within and try so hard to "deal" and become who we want to be. Comes a point each of us want "MORE" - but what is the "more" we want? Yeah, some want things, but things get old before the "shiny" wears off - ya notice that? And yeah, we do like getting new things and being gifted with "stuff" but after a while I think what we like isn't about the "things" as much as it's about the feelings we have of being noticed and the "sharing" of attention. And I am not preaching - just throwing my perceptions out there.

Ya know - just saying, "Hi" is scary and really hard sometimes; but saying "Hi" back, is how a conversation begins in all our daydreams.

This is just some thoughts that your words brought to mind. Welcome to writerscafe.

[Julian]

This is so deeply touching- it tugs at the heart of the reader and brings back the memories that most of us have had, from time to time.... people around us seem so caught up in their own dramas, wrapped up tightly in their lives and often they seem to think that they are in a movie, playing some role.... instead of just being the real, true person that they are. Sadly, this seems even more painful when WE are the ones observing all the shallowness and emptiness that are accepted as being "normal" in society. But we who are wise, gain strength by enduring, being our own true selves regardless of the world around us. The strength is within us, if we can only tap into us. Best wishes.

[Planet x]

people are all around me
but no one can hear my voice

You said it all in few words, I could relate to your pain