*////*

She closes from daddy. And i think

shes completely insane.

I crave his affection.

No one,

no one normal, that is, will

understand. Yeah, yeah,

im all fucked up. My mantra.

But if anyone actually

suspects

how fucked up i am, theyve

yet to let me know.

And really, why would

my father

be so taken with her, but distance

himself from me? We're

identical. Expect for the egg/

sperm thing. Would he fall

on his knees

in front of me, if i were

more like mom and less

like him? Would he ome,

begging

to me, too,

let me stay, 

if he realized i want to love

him the way he loves her?

Reviews

[RedInk524]

Not sure if this is about incest or jealousy. I do enjoy the cynical straight voice in this, makes me think of an unseen depraved shadow craving something that none are willing to give. You never know though, someone just may be around the corner to satisfy that craving or fill that void. This looks like lyrics to me, and I love how it is a poem within a poem.

[ATG]

A very interesting poem. I do like the style of it where you place a series of words off to the side of the poem to represent something seperate while remaining in the poem. I have seen this done before, but rarely as well you did it here. The content of the poem seems a bit eerie, but only because it seems a bit truthful. Makes the reader wonder a bit. Overall, a very good read.

[JC]

i dig the stylistic interesting approach and depth.

[Debbie_Philly]

Very raw piece... goes in really deep.. I think theres allot more to the story and you !! :)

[itai]

Interesting ......