Road to Stino Town

 

              “Wake up” called Rand as he walked towards the tiny bedroom in the little house by the edge of the forest.

“I am, I am. Don’t get angry on me, it was your fault that we trained to midnight!” yelled Gravil as he quickly pulled on his pants on and ran out of the room.

“It’s been almost a year since we been to Stino Town, I been thinking about how it's the Shatel festival tomorrow and since we haven’t been there for a while, do you want to go Gravil?”

“Of course I want to go it’s why I was training so hard with my sword. I know this year I am going to take first place in the yearly Sword tournament!” exclaimed Gravil as he jumped up and down with excitement.

“I’m glad you’re so excited. Now go and saddle Harp. And by the way don’t forget to bring your sword.” Rand said casually. “It’s going to be a tough day going down that cursed old horse-worn track all day. So ring your good walking shoes just in case!

            By the time Rand finished talking Gravil had already saddled the horse and packed everything he needed and waited for his father Rand.

            When they were both ready to go, they put the packs on Harp’s back and started to trudge in the mud made by early spring rain. Gravil had his hand on his sword every minute that he walked, while Rand had his bow and arrow nocked and ready to fire in one swift movement. Everyone knew the road going down to was very dangerous because of hungry wolves not having enough to eat. As they walked up further Gravil heard a distant rumble and asked “Do you hear that?”

            “Hear what son?” Rand answer while he pulled the bow’s string up to his cheek.

            “The distant…” Gravil started to say but was cut off by rand pulling him into the forest behind a very thick bush. Just as Gravil was about to say something he saw a army a mile long full of knights marching down the little road lead by a cloaked person who’s hood was pulled up so high that Gravil couldn’t see his face. Out of no where Gravil could feel the hatred this person had to the world. Gravil quickly scampered away from the bush and went deeper into the woods. When the army left and all Gravil could hear was distant rumble he felt a hand on his shoulder he instantly grabbed his attacker and threw him against the nearest birch tree.

            “Whoa there son any harder and you would break my poor old neck!” exclaimed Rand.

            “Sorry father, I thought you were one of the army member or the black hooded guy.” Gravil Apologized “Did you feel his hatred?”

            “No, why is probably one of the armies heading north to do battle. But I sensed something wrong with this army thought.” Rand said rubbing his hurt neck “Let’s continue our way to Stino. Don't want to be late for the Shatel festival!”

            As they continued towards the village they were tenser than they had ever been. Before they reached Stino town Rand grabbed his bow and pulled the string to his cheek he slowly moved towards the village. When they reached the gates they noticed that guards have been put there. Two of the guards were Rand’s friends. When they finished unpacking and was heading towards the Babla Inn a group of men came running towards them with spears and sword they both reacted by drawing their weapon too. When the group reached them they saw it was Mat and Peter. Rand and Gravil were just about to say ‘hi’ when they were ambushed from behind and the world went black.   

 

Author's Note

This is my first chapter please comment on where i can improve on.

Reviews

[SRMarx]

This is a good beginning. You have written engaging characters. I am interested to read further and learn more about them.

[Bloodyfox]

thank you

[ebbie]

I think this was quite good. You have a few grammatical errors, as well as some spelling mistakes. The biggest one was probably yearly, which is supposed to be annually. But I'd definitely read more of your work :)

[John]

Good start, leaves you interested. My only comment would be try and read it aloud to yourself, it's kinda awkward but you can find a lot of ways to improve how your writing sounds if you do that. I'd read more when it came out.

[John]

good

[Emily]

Good start, leaves you interested. My only comment would be try and read it aloud to yourself, it's kinda awkward but you can find a lot of ways to improve how your writing sounds if you do that. I'd read more when it came out.