how did this happen?

how did this happen?

A Story by greg

This is not what I wanted. How did I end up here? All I wanted was a home what could I have done to deserve this. The grenades not even real, but they don’t know that. When did it start raining? I came this country only a few short hours ago. I only want a home. I have nothing left except a few mementos my parents left me. My entire world contained in one bag. So many dead. Why do they shoot us? What have we done? I don’t want this but I have nothing left. I just want to talk please don’t shoot.

© 2012 greg


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I like how conversational this is! You do a great job reflecting a writer's personal voice. I feel like you could definitely expand more on your situation since even by the end of this I am very confused as to what exactly happened to your narrator, why is he about to be shot? I think there are many ways of approaching that question and you can consider them stylistically. Great technique, I like your use of questions.

Posted 12 Years Ago


greg

12 Years Ago

It was based on the pic.
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Sicole Nender

12 Years Ago

Thats really interesting how a picture or a tattoo inspired you to start a whole narrative. I'd real.. read more

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