This is poetry on steroids, I see. Well, more like a poem with a little edge to it. I get the idea of the poem and it does come off a bit to be like "in your face". And if that's what you're going for, awesome~! Pretty unique poem, my friend~
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
ya basically lol. thank you for your review yurie :)
Loved it... the presentation, rhythm, emotion, the flow and rawness. Had to chuckle at the two last lines." Would they idolize you if they critiqued your s**t, Marry had a little lamb and then you slaughtered it" Well written..Keep writing!
Posted 8 Years Ago
0 of 2 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
punch line delivered... lol just kidding, glad you liked it was my pleasure
Love it, the rhythm and flow is perfect, nothing jarring, completely tailored and streamlined - wonderfully done. I also adore the words you've used, my favourite lines are the first two "Instrumentals on, doesn't make it music, I'm not a f*****g rapper, I'm just writing new s**t", I completely agree with this sentiment, some of the s**t out there now isn't music just coz there are instruments and so called 'lyrics'. This is proper stuff, love it love it love it XxXx
Posted 8 Years Ago
0 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
i agree, in my opinion the problem with music is that it became more about the beat then the lyrics... read morei agree, in my opinion the problem with music is that it became more about the beat then the lyrics. im gllad you like this thanks for the review
This almost seems like it's directed at me, though my sensitivity is on warp speed always. But it seems directed at someone who reviewed your writing with a very negative slant. I know I'm too old to understand a lot of the cultural references you mention and it kind of makes me feel inferior. I think you have all the talent in the world, and I think I may be too old to properly appreciate it. Don't quit RR'ing me though, please. take care...dan
Posted 8 Years Ago
0 of 2 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
lol not at you at all, or anyone else, i wouldnt stoop to the level of revenge on writerscafe,.. thi.. read morelol not at you at all, or anyone else, i wouldnt stoop to the level of revenge on writerscafe,.. this is where i go to get away from the real world, not start drama . just a broad statement that what i write is poetry, but if you throw a beat on it yea it could be a rap...i find on here their is a distinct difrence between the two of them and i dont agree with those standards....im not sure if it was this or the one before/after it but i didnt send rr out because i was curious how the numbers would look without the rr support... long story short, were good man, aint no worries hahaha
8 Years Ago
Thanks for the reassurance; yeah, this came as a RR...always glad to get your RRs. So do think this .. read moreThanks for the reassurance; yeah, this came as a RR...always glad to get your RRs. So do think this old f**k can continue to review you even if I don't understand your most current cultural refs? I may be dying but I'll keep on trying, blitzed! take care...dan
i give them the plans i drew up
with thoughts methodically calculated
and so intricately placed ,
every outcome was accounted for
and algebraically related.
f*****g statistically graced,
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