Dosent Make It Musik

Dosent Make It Musik

A Poem by BLitZeD

Instrumentals on, doesn't make it music, 
I'm not a f*****g rapper, I'm just writing new s**t 
Find the words amusing, curses don't get muted 
F*****g rip this s**t, b***h what the f**k do you think
I tell it how it is, yet a story tellers music
Metaphors and blueprints, 
Mechs destroyed, your loosing
Metallic pulse in shoe prints
Magnetic tech in two rings, a few kinks
 This is poetry, what the f**k did you bring  
Loose my place but not my thoughts, repeating myself in ink
Really I'm on the brink, close to the edge, kitchen sink 
What would Poe say, what would Pac think, 
Would they idolize you if they critiqued your s**t
Marry had a little lamb and then you slaughtered it 

© 2015 BLitZeD


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This is poetry on steroids, I see. Well, more like a poem with a little edge to it. I get the idea of the poem and it does come off a bit to be like "in your face". And if that's what you're going for, awesome~! Pretty unique poem, my friend~

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

ya basically lol. thank you for your review yurie :)
So what's this all about? I see only cursing, and telling others, that their writing is s**t.
Well, this is just crappy words, forced into lines.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 3 people found this review constructive.

silent poet

8 Years Ago

this is what you call blitzed plain and simple
A writer

8 Years Ago

aha...So put simply, you're just a jerk off. Good to know. Bye.
silent poet

8 Years Ago

says the JERK! good day now :)
not a rapper yet your delivery killed this on sight!!! completely dopeness!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.

BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

i know right...*shakes head and smiles*
BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

thanks for the defense on the next comment up
Loved it... the presentation, rhythm, emotion, the flow and rawness. Had to chuckle at the two last lines." Would they idolize you if they critiqued your s**t, Marry had a little lamb and then you slaughtered it" Well written..Keep writing!


Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.

BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

punch line delivered... lol just kidding, glad you liked it was my pleasure
Love it, the rhythm and flow is perfect, nothing jarring, completely tailored and streamlined - wonderfully done. I also adore the words you've used, my favourite lines are the first two "Instrumentals on, doesn't make it music, I'm not a f*****g rapper, I'm just writing new s**t", I completely agree with this sentiment, some of the s**t out there now isn't music just coz there are instruments and so called 'lyrics'. This is proper stuff, love it love it love it XxXx

Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

i agree, in my opinion the problem with music is that it became more about the beat then the lyrics... read more
I loved the flow and rhythm of how you wrote this, friend. Good Job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

highly appreciated poison
McBear

8 Years Ago

:) My pleasure!
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dan
This almost seems like it's directed at me, though my sensitivity is on warp speed always. But it seems directed at someone who reviewed your writing with a very negative slant. I know I'm too old to understand a lot of the cultural references you mention and it kind of makes me feel inferior. I think you have all the talent in the world, and I think I may be too old to properly appreciate it. Don't quit RR'ing me though, please. take care...dan

Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.

BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

lol not at you at all, or anyone else, i wouldnt stoop to the level of revenge on writerscafe,.. thi.. read more
dan

8 Years Ago

Thanks for the reassurance; yeah, this came as a RR...always glad to get your RRs. So do think this .. read more
I loved it!
Very well written!
Keep on writing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

: )
Great!!!!!!!!!!!!! And I have a poem I want to run by you

Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

ok,. inbox it to me

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