Ascension

Divine intervention

A frame of mind to slow time back to the picture in that frame, emotions i hide, wounds unhealed but i'm not afraid, 

I embrace my ascension 

Brace for a reunion with my crew that resides in the heavens.

So when i die, rest easy, Ill sleep when i'm dead, until then the rest i'm still getting 

Reviews

[Bear]

Witty with words, graphic with descriptions, yet idealistic on details, lax on construction of form but good with building blocks that make a poem. Having just read many of your poems without leaving a review, a guild had started to build inside for doing so. Thusly I post of the character and quality I find in your poetry, the lax on construction is because the sentence structure in many of your poems restrict flow.

[Nigel Newman]

Hi BLitZeD! Thanks for your friend request. I'll accept it, but I thought it might interest you to know that I've read about 4 of your poems, and I'm a little surprised at myself about how inaccessible I find them. Clearly you have a following who write constructive supportive feedback, so I take it as a challenge to myself to open part of me to recognise and maybe leverage from some of the techniques you employ. (I write lyrics for my amateur band).

This one 'Ascension' I could get into a little more. It might amuse you that there's an old country song by John and Audrey Wiggins called 'Sleep when I'm dead!'.

The thing that fascinates me - and challenges me - about poems, is the care the writer must give to every single word and even the punctuation. In this one, for example, I find it interesting that you 'brace' for a reunion whilst in some ways seeming to welcome it. Also, for example, I might have been tempted to split the last line onto two, with a full stop after 'dead' and then 'Until' on the new final line - but you didn't, and you had a reason for this. At times, I feel like I do when we go to France and pick up just enough words in a conversation to COMPLETELY and embarrassingly misunderstand the sense of what was said!

Anyway thanks for the Friends invitation, and I shall try harder!!
Cheers
Nigel

[BLitZeD]

so in what way do you mean inaccessible? as in figuring out what it says in between lines?

[Nigel Newman]

I think my comprehension of poetry pretty much stopped about 1975, so I've got out of the habit. I used to like things like Robert Frost's Two Roads, and some of Roger McGough's early stuff. Nowadays the closest I get to poetry is lyrics. My favourite lyricists include, in no special order, Paul Simon, Bernie Taupin, and Clive James.

So inaccessibility is, yes, what's between the missing words. That said, I quite like the 5-7-5 structure of Haikus and dabble with those. For me, 'getting' poems requires more intellectual effort, and I think over the years I've just become lazy.

So I mean what i said; I'll come back from time to time, and may even lob in a haiku now and then. But I think story-prose will remain my favoured style. Not sure I've fully answered your question?

[Ganesh Kelagina Beedu S..]

Short but really profound and appealing

[B]

Hmmmm
The dark side can be tempting
I see so much in such few words here
I feel like there is more you would like to pour out

[Emily]

Very nice wording!
Well done!!

[Not here]

that was short but i loved it :) i feel like the words just flowed well. great job

[BLitZeD]

was goin 4 short truth ty again

[Not here]

yeah i see that you were aiming for that. you did good

[Insight "MH"]

You make letting go so easy, and that, needs a brave ascensional, which you have created here. Thank you for sharing.

Insight.

[Ruth]

Ascension is a release, those wounds we hide can not hide from ascension, powerful write...

[BLitZeD]

ty miss silver :)

[BLitZeD]

like ur hair color btw lol

[Ruth]

You are welcome hon :)

[Rana]

That's quite a beautiful perspective, profound and grand. Oh i like how you picture it.

[dan]

Blitzed, So INTENSE in few words, a departure from your norm. This may be the most EVOCATIVE piece of yours that I've reviewed. I don't need to waste words either: incredible. take care...dan

[BLitZeD]

thank u dan always appreciated