BLaTtAv3lli (Mattavelli- Ft.BLitZ3D)

Mattavelli- Ft.BLitZ3D

BLaTtAv3lli 

Mattavelli & BLitZ3D

Car bombs shake a city to the brink. 
Generals analyze it and think
It's time to go to war. 

Leave there entire race extinct

Church bells shake inside 

Their strategy they rethink

Machine guns rattle in the streets.
A bullet cares not whom it meets.
It's gruesome work is done.

Bleeding sons lay dead like cattle from the heat

The pin f*****g pull it, flying chunks of meat 

Hoodlums and I.E.D's lead a reluctant retreat

Missiles launch from ships at sea;

Who is there that honestly
Can say what's right and wrong.

Drones approach, through the air silently 

Waiting they stare, just waiting but they're there

Out of sight but bombs range long

All nations join the game.

The world is not the same.
It hits us all at home

A military police state

Our flag in flames

An outcome we should have known 

With a flash of light

No one's left to fight. 
A city's turned to dust.

An explosion of pearls

The harbor it rusts

Hiroshima reincarnated, the actions of flight

No more ideals.

No more appeals.
Just burn the whole thing down.

The radiations real

The isotopes peel

Turned into a nuclear playground 

Author's Note

Mattavelli-- http://www.writerscafe.org/mattavelli

Reviews

[B]

The geniuses that decide to go to war
Are fools

War should come to you
And you should do everything in your power to avoid it

And when all fails
You put your fist up and throw the punch

After doing so
Feeling oh my god what have i done

[Shivai]

Whoa
So effective "No one's left to fight. A city's turned to dust."
Brought tears to my eyes!
Well written!

[xansizi]

A great piece of writing about the futility and pointlessness of war. I thought it was very thought-provoking. i especially liked the imagery about the bullet not caring who it meets- it shows that everyone is a victim of war

[JayceeC]

Line 6 there needs to be Their. And Line 17 They're there.

This is a great social commentary on the state of the world and how quickly we let things escalate to the point of total destruction.
The two of you did a great job collaborating on this. It's very cohesive and does not lose focus or direction.

[BLitZeD]

ya i suck at spelling and grammar lol. thank you much for your review and help

[Emily]

I like the meaning a lot!
Great job both of you!

[BLitZeD]

thanks alot

[Shea McWilliams]

I love the words and the descriptions and just that whole thing really. It was so powerful and truthful. It's kind of frightening but it's a very good piece. Keep writing!

[BLitZeD]

thank you , very glad u liked it

[Michael Wright]

Excellent approach to this type of topic. Not easy to write on honestly.

[BLitZeD]

thank u sir

[Emily]

Really great doom-laden words here! I just have a few grammar issues. 2nd stanza, last line, should be "Their strategy they rethink".
3rd stanza last line-"It gruesome work is done" instead of "it's"
6th stanza 2nd line- "Waiting they stare, just waiting but they're there" instead of "there their"
Great write!

[BLitZeD]

thank you very much for your review n help

[Emily]

You're welcome!

[micky]

Wow the two of you really painted a good picture here...your words so descriptive. ...so we'll conveyed. ...This is a great piece by the to of you and an awesome topic ...well done :)

[BLitZeD]

thank you Mickey Mouse lol

[micky]

Haha so funny blitz :P

[BLitZeD]

Miss mouse ;)

[micky]

Miss u to lol....

[R Smith]

excellent writing my two friends, you took us from street fighting to nuclear war in the blink of a pen, a stunning but frightening future that beckons us to find it, unless we turn away now, great write :)

[BLitZeD]

thank you sir