Multiple Stories

I didnt exactly accomplish what i wanted to

its like a fucked up version of the story i was trying to pull you into

with knights of glory

in tired nights of glory

fight knights of glory

in nights of glory 

to tell knights the next night with glory

confidence of an unknown calliber 

rush in first from the stone drawing Excaliber

how with her tone, i could get loud with her

 wind in the sail for sure, hail could burn down with her

Al Capone around with her ,so back to the glory n how i was so down for her

i tried to rewrite love

this is my horror story 

the words came up short 

far fetched with a ill beat

a map of recourse 

but the chorus was still weak

pen lay still for weeks, even the ink was mad

as it witnessed a corpse, track lay dead on the pad 

it weeps it cried, the paper was sad 

cant sleep it tried it scribbles it drags

the tone doesn't change, dead end riddles and snags

cant even type, the f*****g hour glass lags 

Windows are broke, Chrome shooting blanks

powers on real fast but the connection still hangs

Reviews

[FateDictates]

loved the raw honest and unpretentious tone and tempo this imprinted..loved it..curtsy bow

[BLitZeD]

thank you very much 4 the kind words

[youngkingkwan]

It's ok, to many nights and glory for me. No hate, just honesty.

[BLitZeD]

all good, i felt the same way at first but it kinda grew on me

[Michael Wright]

decent freestyle writing good work

[BLitZeD]

ty, i always appreciate your time

[dan]

blitzkrieg, This is actually a great piece of writing! Intensity blistering each line, emotions right on the surface, an honest write from the heart. You've got some skills, b. Keep working with them, push your thoughts from mind to pen (keyboard), tie them up with a big string of sighs. take care...dan

[BLitZeD]

thank you sir

[JordynKay]

Your writing style is beautiful and your wording is on point sir/not sir! I love this.

[BLitZeD]

thank u much :)

[Richard Guimond]

Ball pen knight fighting with an ASCII sword on blank page battlefield Words came short but ideas found their target. Mission accomplished! Pick the prize, get the girl, pass by ''GO'' but do not collect $200.00 ( sorry, you wish!)

[BLitZeD]

a ball pen knife fighting with an ASCII sword on a blank page battlefield....epic comment, i once again tilt my hat to you sir

[silent poet]

You made me lose my appetite , And this feeling in my gut? I'm literally rubbing my stomach trying to make it stop.. I don't know what the hell just happened but I need to come back to this again.. with a well thought out review

[BLitZeD]

lol fair enough

[silent poet]

you once said I read too deep into things but yet, YOU send me to read DEEP into things?! lol but not funny because THIS is the absolute best you've ever written in my opinion! I know my opinion doesn't hold weight or matter much, I'm just a lady with a heart in a pen. But to a person like me, I need to know what these stories are! I'm intrigued .. this was beauty within darkness. i sensed heartache, love, denial, defeat, longing, broken hope and I can keep going but I wont!! damn, you got my brain in circles and to you? It's no big deal. But to me? It's EVERYTHING! here I go again. too deep for life smh, I'm sorry..


this is exceptionally arresting, towering and prominent.. you're one striking and spellbinding Muse/force/individual..

[BLitZeD]

i told you you read too deep so you would read deeper

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/blitzed/1552125/

[silent poet]

Trust me I always do.. I enjoyed this