The Slug

The Slug

A Poem by Captain Goldpants

Weary eyed,

I make my cocoa and head for bed,
I remember the cat’s not fed.
I glance down at the bowl, that has
enamelled roses on the apex, and behold!
 
A slug circumnavigating the aforementioned bowl.
 
It’s shoulders are yellow,
It’s knees are green,
It’s the biggest slug I’ve ever seen.
 
‘What’ll I do,’ I said to the cat,
Who lifted her head from where she sat.
But before I had time to think,
The slug rushed off under the sink.

© 2008 Captain Goldpants


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the slug rushed you say?
I always find them to be a bit sluggish.
I like the poem

Posted 14 Years Ago


what a sneaky little slug...

Posted 15 Years Ago


Cute write - this would do well in a collection of children's poetry I think...nice write - made me smile. Hope you are enjoying yourself.
Light,
Siddartha


Posted 16 Years Ago


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LOL, this is a lovely little poem... i enjoyed it, thanks

Posted 16 Years Ago


It's shoulders are yellow,
It's knees are green,
It's the biggest slug I've ever seen.

lol nice rhyme. Just trying to imagine a slug rushing. lol Funny bit!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A slug with yellow shoulders! How very bizarre. I thought they're shoulders all were turqoise.

I love the whimsical observations in this, like the enamelled roses. It's wondefully daft and playful.

And I love the word circumnavigating - it really shows how epic the slug's journey is around the cat bowl.

Bravo sir. A triumph for the surreal.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hey, nice work. reading serious poetry can be boring - this is fun.

kudos for "circumnavigating," by the way.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lol ... this is fun "A slug circumnavigating the aforementioned bowl". . (And all the time me thinking the cat will eat it !) Very nice. Best wishes, Pammy.

Posted 16 Years Ago



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