Break Me

You tried to break me

you tried to make me break you

you tried to create me

you made it all blue

 

you little girl

going down to the riverbank

your pocket full of roses

crushed and dried

 

the soul of your lover

bled into the water

the thorns you kept pushing

into my side

 

you couldn't have me

so you tried to take me

I'm sorry you couldn't make me

that man you always wanted

 

now you try to forget me

my blood in the river run

where you water the horses

under the cold, cold winter sun

 

grabbing at the riverbank

the ground rolls under you

the cold, cold water takes you

into the deep and blue

 

and now you'll never leave

never leave my side

child you are my lover

let's leave it all behind

 

come into the water

down to the sea of mystery

sailing on the ocean together

our boat is just built of love

 

but don't you try to break me

again like you always do

there's no point trying to fake me

I can see through you

 

your face is like the water

your thoughts as clear as the stones

beneath the cold, cold waves

baby, let's go home

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

but don't you try to break me
again like you always do
there's no point trying to fake me
I can see through you

Wonderfully written in all of its sadness. Too stunned to say more.

[Bubo]

Very sad that someone feels a need to crush someone into change, but the person won't totally bend to
the will of the other no matter how it hurts. I liked the forgiving tone in this
"Baby come home"........and it shows me this person is the stronger of the two...............beautifully penned.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

This has a beautiful lyrical tone and the rhyme scheme is not forced but quite lovely. I think many of us poetic types know this kind of feeling between wanting, struggling and loving at the same time. The imagery is stunning and unique. Thank you for sharing. Another wonderful write. I don't understand why you have not been reviewed more often - are you new to the Cafe?
Light,
Siddartha

[Just Manoosh]

but don't you try to break me
again like you always do
there's no point trying to fake me
I can see through you

My honey, we may be broken down but not quite broken ..... there is an acceptance in your words but also fight, you know who you are and you know how much you will take. A lovely piece, though rather sad, but still lovely. I hope Christmas is atleast a little merry? Hugs and kisses. Mx

[Lydia Shutter]

"come into the water
down to the sea of mystery
sailing on the ocean together
our boat is just built of love"

there is something so soothing to this stanza! often new relationships are cut with the thorns from the last relationship. if thoughts are "clear as the stones" it can help get things on the right path again and things can go swimmingly...no pun intended. very romantic write. i enjoyed it. lydia

[Emily B]

It's a long, long way from "My luve is like a red, red rose". But then, I don't imagine Mr. Burns was so disappointed. You've created lines that belie the angry tone. It works, it works very well.