I OFTEN LOOK UP TO THE SKY

i leave it to your interpretations...

I often look up to the sky

gazing till where my eyes reach

a sea of tranquility

speckled with myriad colors of earth

"Oh! how wondrous it'd be"

craves the foolish heart of mine

mustn't it know i ain't got wings

to soar so high?

It's a free world, i assume

contrails of smoke uniting

with clouds so mighty

li'l specks of black gliding

across an expanse of serenity

It's a happy world, i assume

evening hues dancing along the 

bright, blue skyline

as the pleasant beam of dusk

marries the placid sunshine

"wish the sky were home.."

ponders aloud the poor heart of mine

mustn't it know home can't be built 

on blocks of lies?

Yet, i often look up to the sky

through the shattered glass of 

my dusty, blood stained window

Reviews

[Tabby Mac]

I get many images with this piece. I see a person in a dark place. A prisoner of sorts or a person in hiding during a violent time.
The pictures of the sky so powerful with meaning almost like the sky says the world is to be free and happy or meant to be its vastness and grandness almost demands it, but the prisoner narrates his/her dream to follow the calls of the earth but the reality is that there is no freedom or happiness just smoke, pain, and war. To follow the sky would be a lie for there is no happiness or freedom.
Very deep images come to mind. I feel a deep sadness intertwined with acceptance of reality.
Very powerful. Not sure what it was meant to mean but that is where it took me.
Tabby

[Bhumika Rao]

thankss tabby.. :) yes what you think is exactly what i intended to portray!!

[Pooja Chintamani]

Wow. A beam of dusk marries with sunshine that's creates moist in the dried and hopeless heart. How magical your imagination.!!!

[Bhumika Rao]

Thanks a lot ♥

[YanZeros]

very nice write, hope to read more of this kind of poetry. ^^

[Surya]

Quite relaxing, a picture of dreams I could say...I enjoyed it..:)

[Bhumika Rao]

Thanks a lot surya...!!!!

[APOORVA]

this creation shows a million shades of our thinking and creativity.
a very well binded piece, nicely portrayed

[Bhumika Rao]

Thank you somuch....!!

[ern]

This reminded me of when I look up to the beautiful sky. For a while I thought of it literally referring to someone in a recent broken relationship, prisoner, or person in war. Then I also thought maybe it mean't that they felt trapped and it was a metaphor. Maybe their own fear of the world or fear of the lies? Or this could even be a realization that the world is not as cheerful as they originally thought. Either way, it's lovely.

[Bhumika Rao]

I'm quite impressed by the diversity in the interpretations that you made! Well,initially it was meant to be based on children trapped in war torn countries.....while adults fight over insignificant things like religion,power etc.,a kud only wants the world to be as peaceful and beautiful as the sky....

Thanks for your review! I'm glad you appreciate the subjectivity of my poem!!!

[ern]

Aw that's such a great idea! You're welcome!

[Kota Egan]

I really enjoyed reading this!! It was easy to picture myself looking up at a sky like that.

[Bhumika Rao]

thanks a lot egan!!!

[J. Sam Barr]

It was mellow and relaxing till the end approached.

[Bhumika Rao]

thankss j.sam barr

[Celine Heath]

The poem is intense and powerful, you've written it in a way that really gross the readers attention; I love it!

[Bhumika Rao]

thanks a lot celine!! i'm glad you loved it!!

[mou]

it is written in a quite pleasant way that it makes a poetic moonlight everywhere..
for the first time, I guess , visit your page and it's truly beautiful..thanks for the invitation :)

[Bhumika Rao]

thanks a lot mou.....for being kind enough to review my work. it means a lot!!