NOT A VICTOR

NOT A VICTOR

A Poem by Bhumika Rao
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a shockingly large number of people( mostly women) around the world continue to stay in abusive, ruthless relationships due to the fear of societal backlash or the blind, delusional love.....

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Loving you seemed like a fierce battle we fought
only if once i knew the triumph was futile
'cause you cruelly savaged my mind
letting my soul wither away in exile

you race your fingertips on my wounds of grief
your kisses smother the light of my dreams
my gut churns while the moment is sedated
it gets intense, and i hear my soul's screams

do you ever wonder how absurd this seems?
that you fail to count the broken pieces of my heart
you broke, i fixed, we smiled and tangled again
i let you have the cherry, while i kept fallin' apart

eyes are dry, body is sick
heart is numb, face is crystal
i collapse finally; losing the fight
while you walk away; not a victor

 

© 2016 Bhumika Rao


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Hello Bhumika! Thank you for the frnd request. This is your first work that I'm reading and reviewing and I think I really admire the poem so much. Not because of it presentation or how it flows but because of its message which is so very vital and true in this world no matter where we go. Women being abused and hurt every single day staying in abusive relationships... But sadly most of them do not find the courage to step outside of that relationship for the betterment of themselves, and I can feel for them, it's not easy... But again they gotta stand up for them to see the light of life again...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bhumika Rao

7 Years Ago

thank you so much Dhiman....i really feel deeply about this and there was no better way of expressin.. read more



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Sorry it took me so long to read this, its a lovely piece, The words are woven intricate ply to portray the speakers emotions. Lovely, simply lovely.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bhumika Rao

7 Years Ago

thank you so much wayward soul!!!!!
just a word, beautiful !!
you have a potential to be a published writer must say

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bhumika Rao

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Apoorva for your inspiring words!!! It means a lot.....
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This is really beautiful! I especially love the last stanza! The first few lines really captured me. While this piece is sad, this darkness gives it beauty.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bhumika Rao

7 Years Ago

Thanks Nicki!! I use poetry as a tool to comment on social issues and get messages across.........i'.. read more
ern

7 Years Ago

You're welcome and I'm glad you use your writing for that!
very dark poetry!

these given lines're quite proactive, & very piercingly written:

"you race your fingertips on my wounds of grief
your kisses smother the light of my dreams..."

the savagery of cruelty is being shown in such words. it makes saying that.. when love gets replaced with something dark, it gets turned into "lost-humanity" which further turn the men into animals, & animals into the beast of nights'. very deep, & heartfelt it is! you creatively poured down the port of pain into the misery of words plucked from the very miserable life. interesting!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bhumika Rao

7 Years Ago

thanks a lot...you've been kind enough to give your reviews!!! :)
Adam Adams

7 Years Ago

looking forward to reading your work.
A very strong poetry writing reality on today's society that this does exist! Keep writing Bhumika Rao :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bhumika Rao

7 Years Ago

aw thank you....your words are so encouraging!
YanZeros

7 Years Ago

:) you're welcome!
Hello Bhumika! Thank you for the frnd request. This is your first work that I'm reading and reviewing and I think I really admire the poem so much. Not because of it presentation or how it flows but because of its message which is so very vital and true in this world no matter where we go. Women being abused and hurt every single day staying in abusive relationships... But sadly most of them do not find the courage to step outside of that relationship for the betterment of themselves, and I can feel for them, it's not easy... But again they gotta stand up for them to see the light of life again...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bhumika Rao

7 Years Ago

thank you so much Dhiman....i really feel deeply about this and there was no better way of expressin.. read more
deep raw brutal i love it thank you for sharing such a deep part of yourself it was beautifully crafted and intense.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bhumika Rao

7 Years Ago

thank you so much for your appreciation
"Not a victor" expresses emotions of sorrow ...when someone completely loses hope and surrenders
At times, we do give up
Somewhere its talks about lost love

Well conveyed , it was frankly a deep poem

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bhumika Rao

7 Years Ago

thank you so much tazeen...i'm really happy that you liked it
Very deep and offering a peek into your soul. Life is about change with ends and new beginnings.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bhumika Rao

7 Years Ago

thank you so much....i'm glad you liked it!!
This is a really neatly structured piece! The rhyme scheme is just a little offset, then at the end the whole scheme changes, as does the story. This is a complete piece, Awesome work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bhumika Rao

7 Years Ago

thank you so much!!!! this was really beneficial....now i have some great tips to enhace the beauty .. read more
Cerebriation

7 Years Ago

Come check out my catalog. There is plenty of different kinds of work to check out, and the collecti.. read more
Bhumika Rao

7 Years Ago

definitely....!!!

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