Not bad, but if you were going for haiku, this is 4-6-5, which is definitely not the traditional format. Not to say that you have to follow that format, but it looks like you tried to, so just a heads up there. I do like your topic here, though, and you've done a good job with it no matter what format you were going for.
Not bad, but if you were going for haiku, this is 4-6-5, which is definitely not the traditional format. Not to say that you have to follow that format, but it looks like you tried to, so just a heads up there. I do like your topic here, though, and you've done a good job with it no matter what format you were going for.