Saved

It's a song about a boy telling a girl he loves her and then he just forgets about her... and by the end she's been saved.

Have I become a shadow in your mind,
does my existence exist?
I can feel the cold wind touch my lips,
frozen words can't reach you.
Please tell me the truth,
before your lies dissolve me.

I can't hold on any longer,
the pain is just too much.
I'm a flower ready to wilt,
someone please save me.

You told me you loved me to death,
now does neglect seem to be part of love?
The frozen lips of a lie kiss me,
what did I do to deserve this?
Please tell me the truth,
before your lies dissolve me.

I can't hold on any longer,
the pain is just too much.
My heart is ready to wilt,
can someone please save me?

The lies you told me with your eyes,
can't live on any longer.
They burn with the fire of truth,
and you are soon gone.

I can't hold on any longer,
the pain is just too much.
Your lies will soon wilt,
and someone will have saved me.
I'm holding on stronger than ever,
the pain has subsided,
the lies of your voice are gone,
and I am now saved.

Author's Note

What did you think?

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I think this is quite mind blowingly powerful, talk about deep pain from heartache...

You told me you loved me to death,
now does neglect seem to be part of love?
The frozen lips of a lie kiss me,
what did I do to deserve this?

that was my favorite part.

[Nicholas]

Thats beautiful!
Granted it's 1 am... but still... powerfully written, I can feel what you feel (hug) thats awful, no one should have to go through that :(
Though I like the twist at the end, how you go through the majority of the poem sad, cold, lifeless, and towards the end you take a turn for the better, stronger, the pain gone, and finally ending with "and I am now saved"
...well done!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

So powerful! someone in so much pain begging to be save, and sudden relief has come when there saved!

[KAREN]

NICE!!! ! could feel this persons pain, but then I could feel their pain go away as I read the end of the poem and someone saved this person!

[Tate Morgan]

I take it saved by your own self

[Ashley]

i love the first part, however at the end i dont understand how you got saved. maybe you should add more to your song like who saved you? why did they save you? :)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a good poem. I really enjoyed this a lot. It made me feel like I was in the girl's shoes. I know how it feels to have someone you love hurt you like that. It happened with my ex-boyfriends, Lars...and Danny...well I really liked the emotion in this too. Thanks for sharing. :)