Chameleon

It's another version of something I had to do for creative writing.

She casts such a thin shadow,

behind the eyes of those around her.

She speaks loudly what she wants to say,

but it only comes out a whisper. 

She's like that one last ember to die,

hanging on to life more than ever. 

She cries but no one sees,

she laughs but no one cares.

The full moons in her eyes are now waning,

while she's stuck fading.

She knew she'd have to face this horrible fate,

to see her one true mate. 

"I've looked for thee and now you're here" 

"I have come for you my dear" 

the words she longs to hear,

tangled in the web of life,

through the stars of the universe. 

Such a lonely girl she stands,

casting such a thin shadow.

She longs to take in ones true grin,

but hides like the little chameleon. 

Author's Note

I would like to say that those who have read and reviewed, and liked this poem, thank you! When I presented this in class, absolutely no one liked it. It means a lot :)

Reviews

[dovetailer]

well crafted poem...but one question I had was why it would be a horrible fate to see her one true mate?

"I've looked for thee and now you're here"
"I have come for you my dear"
the words she longs to hear,
tangled in the web of life,

this feels like wonderful longing...not a terribly feared outcome...

She seems like a wallflower...unnoticed...inconspicuous...blends into the background like a chameleon...yet she's longing for her one true love...resigned to worship from afar to use an old cliche...

I would suggest having us feel unrequited longing instead of consummate dread or insecurity...which I do feel...if this is your intent, then the poem works for me...

[Chipgirl]

nice, loved it!

[Atheana Kylee-S. C.]

Lovely poem :)

[Ashley]

i like it, maybe you could talk more about fate.

[Jeff Bresee]

Well done. It flows perfectly into the end line.

[TTBoy28]

Nicely done!

[Cassiopia Summers]

I really like this piece, I do believe the title is perfect. (:

[loowzerX]

I think it's an excellent poem. well done :)

[Katie L]

i really like well written.

[.quan.011.]

It seem like she is unsure of herself. It is a very good peom.

[Solitaire-P0ette]

The character is confused...and the juxtaposition between who she is and what comes out is different...her hiding is the way she deals with her life. Great work =)