Message in a Bottle

I died when I left you, but don’t think you lucked out. 

I am stronger than before, much wiser and kinder. 

Who would have thought such evil could lead to such paradise.

You buried me somewhere dark, but I found myself again. 

A light that’ll shine through even in the darkest of depths. 

You took my heart and made a sacrifice, 

a slice and a cut, my happiness for yours. 

You took my self respect, my confidence and self worth.

Just another girl to you, nothing special or sweet. 

Tell me though, tell me, did you ever really love me? 

No? Well great, and there you go like a message in a bottle drifting out to sea. 

Author's Note

hope you liked it (:

Reviews

[Amy R]

Really enjoyed this piece,
Written with such emotion,
I felt every bit of it, reminded me of my past.
Happy I've been through this journey too, at a much better place now,
its always better to let go of people who's merely worth your time & love!
-Amy

[willweb]

Sometimes it is much better to set some of these people afloat on a large ocean. Some we don't need hanging around our beach. This was a bit angry and very cool.

[Robert Haigh]

Sometimes we have to suffer at the hands of a cruel love, which isn't really love at all, before we find the real thing and true happiness. It can make us appreciate true love all the more.

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
Haven't been back to read your words for awhile but here I am again...
I really liked this poem of yours..
So full of truth..
and, so very interesting.
I am thinking you might one of mine called Cry ...
Lisa, now in Spain

[Sami Khalil]

Very straightforward. Thank you for sharing.

[Sami Khalil]

"You buried me somewhere dark, but I found myself again.

A light that’ll shine through even in the darkest of depths."

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Ouch...that hurts, I bet! Reminded me of a 1983 number by Aldo Nova; Victim of a Broken Heart
Lyrics extract –

‘You said you loved me
But you know that that's a lie
You've held another
So it's time to say goodbye

Great write – enjoyed the wordplay and subject matter – well done! :-)

[R E Tree]

This is a very expressive piece. With each line it strengthens the poem. And at the end something is released. I can sense harshness and roughness pushing forward. And a door closing for good..

[no tell writer]

You took my heart and made a sacrifice,
a slice and a cut, my happiness for yours.

Wow, love the words "Made a sacrifice" with my heart,
very vivid imagery....
like this write a lot

[Laz K.]

"hope you liked it (:"
Yes, I did - very much actually, because it resonates very strongly with my own experience.
All I could do was nod while reading through this poem like, "Yes, yes, yes, that's how it feels..."
It's an interesting experience reading someone else's words expressing exactly how you feel.
Well done!