UNTITLED

UNTITLED

A Poem by Dawn
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PLEASE DONT LAUGHT ITS STUPID

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UNTITLED

 

WHEN THE SUN WENT DOWN

THE MOON CAME OUT

THE STARS WERE BRIGHT

HOW GREAT THOU ART

EVERYTHING CAME TO LIFE

WHAT A BEAUTIFUL SIGHT

THE PRAIE CAME TO

SHINE SO BRIGHT

AND IT ILLUMINATED

A FIGHT BIGGER THEN A HOUSE

AND OUT CAME A MOUSE

 

© 2008 Dawn


Author's Note

Dawn
IGNORE ANY GRAMMER

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It started off very well but just at the end it seemed to get a bit lost and I felt that the last line was added just because it rhymed with house, perhaps you could look at it again and just redo the last few lines.... it has potential.

Posted 16 Years Ago



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Added on March 28, 2008

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Dawn
Dawn

Berea, OH



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theres not much to say i love writing poetry i like to writ bout what has happened to me and my feelings more..

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A Poem by Dawn


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A Poem by Dawn