The Real Creator And The Wanabe

Your so damn lucky God forgives

He looks away from all that he saw

He asks all that you do is pray

Your even luckier I'm not your creator

If I had the power to damn your soul, I would

I would let you burn in the pits of hell

I wouldn't look away from every drop of blood that was drawn by your hands

I wouldn't look away from the child that calls to me

I wouldn't look away from every tear that fell

I wouldn't forget the hateful words you spoke

I would throw it back at you

Not in your face, your heart

I would make you feel all that pain and suffering a thousand times more

I would make you choke on your words

Feel the hit behind the punch

Let the blood pour without the wounds ever healing

I would hold your tears in you

Never getting the relief

Never getting the pleasure

Then I would turn away from you

Make you the pleading child

The hurt, sore, pained child that called out for help

When the Devil reaches for you and pulls you down' I won't turn to your screams

I won't turn to the fire consuming you

But God would, he would pull you up

Bring you to the light at your prayers for forgiveness and mercy

Again, your so damn lucky I'm not your creator, I would give you what you deserve.

Author's Note

I am not a real religous person, though I am Christan. Just wanted to say that tad bit of info. Excuse my errors to.

Reviews

[Liz-z]

Wow, it's very strong... I'm not so much of a religious gal, but I still have my limits... and I guess it was nice reading other peoples point of views.
I will do as you ask and ignore the poor errors... lol But overall the angry message was well spoken! :)
Creatively written! :D

[Tony]

I liked the fast paced movement of this piece and it reads very clearly and precisely. A rapid fire, venom packed punch from top to bottom. Very captivating write!

Makosica

[Radioactive]

The raw emotion is presented beautifully, and such a compelling driving force. You can practically feel the anger through the screen. Well done.

XX Maddie

[Dream Weaver]

Just a tad angry are we? I'm just happy I'm
not on the recieving end of this poem..Phew..
I can feel the hurt of being wronged in this
write..Such fiery hatred and loathing, I must
say you've captured that part very well..

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

vivid~ raw~ a pure souls scream~ powerful prresentation with engaging forceful push into the mind of the reader~

[Tony]

Things would probably change, were this author in charge.....
Good healthy ranting and raving... I like it.

[...]

. ah! ... raw emotion ... unadulterated magic ... poetic rage ... a heart of gold ... and so much spunk ...

[paul]

another powerful poem .