You you are.

I'm still pondering this thought. I believe I can expand on it.

It's not the you you show,
because everybody knows.
It's not the you you hide,
because that's locked up inside.
It might be the you you think,
but that's gone in a wink.
Is it the you you would be?
that would end too simply.
Is it the you you would have others want?
Is the lie worth the façade?
It comes down to the you you are.
it's the sum that forms the star.

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[Tania Leigh]

Oh, I like this, Blake....excellent insight on our desire to have people perceive us a certain way, while we keep the real "us" to ourselves.

"It's not the you you hide,
because that's locked up inside"

"It comes down to the you you are.
it's the sum that forms the star."

Great piece!

[E. M. Murren]

What a beautiful view... the sum of the parts is less than the whole. Fabulous perspective. Fabulous style as well. The rhythm and rhyme flow so gracefully. Bravo.

[Lucinda Bogart]

I have written a response....which I will post later (I can't seem to post from work.....probably some sort of security setting). I will of course link to this posting of yours....kewl ??!! I hope you're on pins and needles... heheheh !!

[forfila]

I see where you are going with this, the alter ego that has a grasp on us all. Who would we be if we were alone? the only way to tell with people is by knowing who they have known. I guess this subject could test us all on some level, nice job.

Great write

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[justjenn_2u]

I am speechless. You have an amazing way of thinking. You are able to create such powerful word play making this poem so intruiguing. And yes, I would be very interested in reading the expansion you may write. A deeper insight! Wow!