To The Girl Who Loves Him Next

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To the girl who loves him next, 

He hates smiling with his teeth, but god you’ll love it when he does. His smile is both beautiful and contagious. And he doesn’t like to talk about his dark days, but when he does, listen as hard as your ears will let you. You’ll want to know everything, understand every piece of him, inside and out, completely and utterly. He is smart. His mind is made of gold and every time he speaks, you’ll swear you feel richer. 

He is the kind of boy your mother will love. Since knowing him, you get better. You stop wearing low cut shirts, start using bigger words. He’s a goddamn mystery, but he’ll teach you chemistry and history like he knows the answers to the universe. 

He is the type of person you could fall in love with. And its not hard because he knows how to steal your breath in 12 different ways. You’ll wonder if he knows that he makes your stomach hurt at night with everything you could be and what would he say if you told him he brought life to your words and you could write again without stopping. every. line.

He is the kind of boy that scares the hell out of you. You will wish that you could be his gravity, but he cannot be constrained to the ground. He’s got stars in his eyes, that boy belongs in the sky and I hope you know about the galaxies inside him.

Author's Note

I'm not sure what to call this type of writing and also how to organize it. If you have any ideas, I would appreciate them.

Reviews

[Dafydd M Harvey]

I'd just like to say that I think this is really good. As to its 'type' - I'd say it's open form. It's poetry as prose. I love the natural and almost religious imagery - "God damn", "scares the hell out of you". Chemistry, history, stars, gravity, gold and galaxies - the love feels elemental and therefore incredibly deep and real. I also loved the end stops - "stopping. Every. Line." Really clever. Language feels natural and I genuinely think it's just great. Thank you.

[costa siwale]

a well written piece, can make for a good novel

[Addict With a Pen]

Very beautiful writing! I love the way you describe him, to 'the girl who loves him next'. It's very sad, and well written.

[Urja Gokani]

amazingly written keep it up !!

[gentlekindness]

I like the line You wish you could be his gravity. It is great metaphor. Keep expressing your thoughts on paper. Let it come from inside and you can't go wrong.
Annie

[wordman]

sounds like your still in love with him,and this is a great tribute

[Verdant Cynic]

That's a bittersweet letter. The image I get is this charming person, who is so elusive, who you want to keep forever, but alas, they slip away. Was the ending a warning? A warning that he might break the heart of the girl who loved her next?

My thoughts are to structure this more like a letter, and end it with "Sincerely, the girl who loved him last". It could be a letter poem!

[Caroline Blair]

I'd like to keep the meaning up to interpretation and I loved hearing your view on it. I feel like everyone should be able to decide for themselves what it means. Thank you for the suggestion, I will definitely consider that! :)