Poem – She Danced

She danced in the rain

The drops were

Mixed with shards of glass

As she fell a charm bracelet

Escaped her grasp

Laying on the street

Beside her but inches from her hand

A stream of water

With tints of red

That shows a slight shimmer

Against the colorless snapshot

Empty eyes open

But cannot see

As her right shoe sits

As if dangling

With only the top of her foot

Still inside

As the air of life

And death collide

Barely noticed by

The passers by

How can this be

A life not mourned

Or even just treated respectfully

Once just a glimmer

In an eye

Now a soon to be memory

Over which pain will be felt

Causing many a mourner to cry

Or at least one can hope

One can hope

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Priscilla Sayers]

Such a sad story and a beautifully poetic piece of imagery. Like the shot in a movie. That one moment where the audience feels the compassion to mourn for the character with no one to mourn their death and leaves them to wonder if anyone every celebrated thier life. Great work!

[rkm]

this poem stirred both compassion for the life not mourned and anger at the complacency of people which are more dead I wonder the girl or the passersby who barley notice very good imagery.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

A sad story, but wonderfully written. It basically captures the essence of humanity as we know it today. "a life not mourned or even treated respectfully" its so hard to believe that when someone is in desperate need of help that not one person in this world would give a damn and just look the other way. Sadly, that is how the world is today, too much greed and not enough compassion for our fellow man. This is pure brilliance. Wonderfully penned, nicely done!

~Anna Rose

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

A very interesting poem.

[Fragilebrokendreams]

Its so sad and I can completely understand it. Its probably something you could see actually see anywhere really. But it is beautiful.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Stirring, an awesome piece for sure.

[EMF]

Both sad and beautiful. A snapshot with a camera of the mind. Great work

[Muse]

The rain the glass....it sounded cold and painful. A life not mourned is indeed such a sad waste of soul and essence. And you painted a picture of this in my minds eye...making me blink a few times...well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem was amazing. I will add to my favorite. The description made the scene come alive. I like the desire of the poem. The strong ending gave balance and life to the poem.
"Now a soon to be memory
Over which pain will be felt
Causing many a mourner to cry
Or at least one can hope
One can hope"
Thank you for a outstanding poem. I like the above lines.
Coyote

[fireblossom]

That is really good writing. You capture a scene on the page. Well done.

[EMMIE]

this is so beautiful and sad, it really touched me...that's when you know you are great...when you can touch somebody so deeply with your words thanks for sharing