A Stroll Down The Lane

The sun set to the far corner of the sky,

not touching her silk skin but reflecting her pure white dress to my eyes.

An angel with a parasol in hand.

Her dress with one single red rose

a sun hat with a blue ribbon that dances a ballet in the wind.

The earth seems to stop to see a beautiful site like this, as do I.

For she is my love, she is my life, she is my all.

What a day for this sky of ocean blue with cotton ball cloud to form.

It’s as if the heavens have given us a sign,

to guide us to a magical place.

Not damaging her altar of a body I whisk it away to a place with meaning for both of us.

The garden.

Filled with ponds, sleeping willows, and water lilies scattered all around,

A little wood bridge stretch across a pond.

Only a few paces away from the bridge till I cross into a new life.

With each step and each breath I take the pounding in my chest quickens.

I stop it what is the center of the world and got down on a knee about to pray

reaching into my pocket for a black box.

I can already see visions of the future,

with two angels on the hill.

One holding a parasol.

*Monet- Lady With a Parasol

Monet- Bridge Over a Pond of Water Lilies*

Reviews

[Lily Anson]

This is a very well written poem! I like how it's extremely descriptive and yet, avoids using super cliche words. The only thing is that, in the 5th line from the bottom, it says, "I stop it what is..." Do you mean "I stop at..."? Also, in the same line, it briefly changes to past tense. Other than that, this is amazing!

[Chloe Garber]

The use of imagery in this poem was good! It was placed in all the right spots, not too much or too little. It really tied the whole story together. Also, I could really hear a voice with this one-it made me feel connected, like I was the one walking across the bridge into a new life. I can tell you put some good effort into this. Keep up the good work!

[Vincent Eguakun]

I like how deep and romantic the poem gets. Especially the last stanza.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Beautiful, deep, meaningful and romantic!
I really enjoyed reading this piece.
Seems like you really put your heart into it.
It was really sweet and romantic, romantic poems are the best :)
Keep writing :)